Instead of using the first sentence, I'd start the essay with "I started violin lessons at age four."
I think I agree. OR, as an alternative, you can look to see the main idea of the whole thing.. the meaning. Give a thesis statement in place of that boring first sentence. Give a thesis statement that the reader will enjoy and remember... one that conveys the theme you want to convey in these 150 words.
The angelic sound, the sheer grandeur- the harp had an alluring quality that attracted both my listeners and myself.
Hey, this is very good!! You write well...
It sounds nice to say 'my listeners and myself' but I think it is more correct to say 'my listeners and me.' YET, I really like your way better! I think it may actually be correct.