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'I want to be myself' - Common app essay - Topic of my choice


Chelo 5 / 13  
Jan 1, 2012   #1
Be MYSELF

please be critical I really need to clear things up here. grammar check is also needed. any feedback will be greatly appreciated.

I want to be myself

During my childhood I had always thought that craving to emulate someone famous was normal; all my friends wanted to be movie stars or almighty soldiers, whom they saw on TV; little did I know how difficult it was to find out what I really wanted. I tried to dig into to my mind to perceive the real nature of myself. The result was quite surprising, I answered the question - I want to be myself. I want to do what I love, I don't want to be like others. When looking back to past I don't want to have a feeling that I have lived someones life, but mine. I am an individual having my opinions about diverse things, thus I perceive the world in my way.

I hate hatred. Though I still hate things. I hate flattery - people trying to please each-other just because they are expecting to get a profit out of it; when you live this life and then doubt yourself, you lose everything. I often argue; not because I want to, but because I always defend my position; I hate when one agrees with every single opinion. I hate plagiarism and imitating.

No man exists without negative traits. I am one of them; We aren't perfect, but negative characteristics shouldn't overcome positive ones, this will let us to form as a kind-hearted persons.

I am curious, I regard this characteristic to serve a good purpose: "Curiosity is free-wheeling intelligence." (Alistair Cooke).

I have friends whom I trust blindly, however I know that individuals are alone against their lives, no one can live instead of me. One Georgian writer said "you are alive when you feel otherwise you are dead." When we feel the world, we are with everyone and in everything, that's how we deal with life.

I don't want to follow the dogmatic ideas and clueless directions which sometimes exhausts me with its ineptitude. I will follow my innermost and always do what I think is right.

I'll never grow old. I'll never stop loving what I do . I'll never stop being curious. I'll never stop being me.
Davemedsci 5 / 25  
Jan 1, 2012   #2
One sentence is a whole paragraph so you should definitely merge that

"No man exists without negative traits. I am one of them; We aren't perfect, but negative characteristics shouldn't overcome positive ones, this will let us to form as a kind-hearted persons."

Double negative

"I hate hatred"
OP Chelo 5 / 13  
Jan 1, 2012   #3
Davemedsci

thanks for the answer. I appreciate that I'll try to improve

Guys please help it is due tonight be brutally honest.


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