My name is Nam and I am 23 years old . Business has always been my interest because I believe for being a successful businessman you should know about people with different cultural backgrounds in addition to academic education. For this reason, I decided to studyI am a third year student in Business Administration majorand, now, I am in the third year of my study . (It would be better to say something about your neighborhood before giving its name. For example :"I currently live in a very lovely and beautiful district called Tan Phu, where I built all my childhood and adolescence memories)I'm currently living in Tan Phu district . I know myself as a sociable person and because of this trait I have many friends around meI like making new friends, . L istening to music, playing sports are also my favorite hobbies that I spent xx hours a day on them
I think you should start the essay with what I quoted above. In fact, you should introduce yourself first, and then talk about your personality.
In addition, I think you should talk about your hobbies and your sociability where you are talking about your personality and the things that you like. Write why you like these things and why you listen to music, for example, in your free time.