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My name is Ayie. I am from Selangor; check my basic English


Budak88kampung 2 / 3  
Sep 14, 2012   #1
My name is Ayie. I am from Selangor which is located in the city centre of Malaysia. I have 5 siblings and I'm the youngest one. My father worked as farm settler and my mother is housewife. I have completed my degree in business and have been waiting for the graduation day. I'm 24 years old. At leisure time, I like jogging and stretching. It will helps me to sustain my weight and toned muscles. My previous job is in sales and marketing company where I have to study about marketing plan, disciplinary new products and do some researches about company's backgrounds. In my future career, I want to be a prominent banker.I love to take challenges and would see the real capability of me to compete with those who are already in banking line. Yet, I have planned to pursue my study at master level in UK but I need to brush up my English first. Now, I'm jobless and a job seeker and I have a lot of interviews session in banking, accounting and auditing. In a nutshell, whatever I do, I will try my best to achieve remarkable achievements that I have ever did. Be a sanguine person would be a more confident and perfectionist. Thank you.
ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 672 148  
Sep 14, 2012   #2
in the citycentral areacentre of Malaysia.

5 siblings

write the numbers under 10 in words

my mother is a housewife

I'm 24 years old.

write this sentence as the second sentence just after giving your name and before talking about your siblings and your parents.

At leisure time, I like jogging and stretching

suggestion:"jogging and stretching are my favorite leisure activities."

It will helpsSuch activities can help me to sustain my weight and toned muscles.

researches

"research" is an uncountable noun and you cannot use it in plural form.

in the UK
chess1921 1 / 11  
Sep 14, 2012   #3
My name is Ayie. I am from Selangor which is located in the central area of Malaysia. I have 5 siblings and I'm the youngest one. My father works as farm settler and my mother is a housewife. I have completed a degree in business and have been waiting for the graduation day. I'm 24 years old. At leisure time, I like jogging and stretching, it will help me to sustain my weight and tone down muscles. My previous job was in sales and a marketing company where I had to study about a marketing plan, disciplinary new products and do some research about company's backgrounds. In my future carer, I want to be a prominent banker.I love to take challenges and would see the real capability of me to compete with those who are already in banking line. Yet, I have planned to pursue my study at master level in UK but I need to brush up my English first. Now, I'm jobless and a job seeker and I have a lot of interviews session in banking, accounting and auditing. In a nutshell, whatever I do, I will try my best to achieve remarkable achievements that I have ever did. Be a sanguine person would be a more confident and perfectionist. Thank you.

I fixed your grammer, now it sounds more flowing.
Good Luck, hope you find a job soon.


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