I assume you intend this essay to be about your experience with the Model UN Conference.
^Hmmm. That would make sense. I thought Vishal's activity was just saying 'Vishal Patel, representing the delegation of Gabon'
I was led to that assumption, because that is how he starts the essay off.
Then, he says 'Though
I speak these words only a few days a year, I have come to cherish them'
^So effectively, he is implying that he says these words, and since he cherishes them. Alright,
'This is how I introduce myself at a Model UN Conference. Joining the club following a friend's advice, I
have come to appreciate it.'
^It is only assumable that he appreciates introducing himself, with those seven words.
So the question here is, what is the activity. Saying those seven words, are some membership at the Model UN Conference. If it the latter Vishal, I suggest completely removing the introductory lines, and just focus on your role at the Model UN Conference. If it is the former however, then read my suggestions above. In my previous post that is