Hey, so I have to write this essay for university and its a personal narrative where I had to present a belief/significance of this essay which for me was facing my fears.
It's not completely finished but I need a lot of help on the awkward syntax/wording and if you guys could give me some advice on what sensory details and emotional appeal I could add to also make it more descriptive would be nice. thank you! (thesis is bolded)
Essay (Rough copy):
My very first Kpop audition was for a company called JYP Entertainment. They were holding global auditions all around the world and happened to come to Toronto in the fall of 2017. Having been a huge fan of Kpop for over 10 years, I decided to try my odds and audition. Normally, I would've been too scared to even bother going, but this year was different. This year, I realized that I had to face my fears and audition or else I'll regret it for the rest of my life. Never give up without trying because you never know what can happen.
Paragraph 1: Will be about how I felt prior to the audition date. I knew about the audition a couple months in advance, will also talk about my friend who is the only other character in the essay. We both went and auditioned, I danced, also will be talking about my emotions and how I felt
Now this is where im confused and stuck. I dont know what else to talk about for the rest of the essay. I cant switch topics now because I already handed in my rough copy and everything.