Here is my essay for UCF: "What qualities or unique characteristics do you possess that would allow you to contribute to the UCF community?"
University of Central Florida is a remarkable and oustanding university with qualities that I possess and have strived for throughout my years of education. As a past student of two top rated International Baccalaureate schools, and presently a high school student of an exemplified Medical Academy, I have always been placed among demanding and rigorously academic learning. Not only have I learned to be an exceptional learner, but the things taught to me, will continue to benefit me as a leader through the UCF community.
My ambition while attending UCF is to make a difference with my voice. I enjoy giving presentations and speeches. When speaking my voice has a tone that grasp the attention of others, and carries on as a leader. As a commercial once said "When E.F. Hutton speaks, everyone listens." and that will be me. In the UCF community, I want to carry on my leadership as one of the leading voices, a quality I developed through my achievements.
Being inducted into the National Achievers Society, was a great honor bestowed upon me. N.A.S. has greatly enriched my life and my accomplishments. Through this organization I have competed in the FEF Math Bowl team for three years where we placed 4th in two of those years. I am also a member of the Health Occupations Students of America organization, where I placed 1st for two consecutive years in a medical competition. Both of these organizations have played an important part in my achievements in which I look forward to bring to the UCF community.Please critique my essay. I would really appreciate it.