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Natural Reflection - Williams College Supplementary Window Essay


nkidd23 1 / 1  
Jan 14, 2010   #1
Imagine looking through a window at any environment that is particularly significant to you. Reflect on the scene, paying close attention to the relation between what you are

seeing and why it is meaningful to you. Please limit your statement to 300 words.


Natural Reflection

My gaze moves from my empty bowl to the window of my tent. I observe the rugged landscape around me. The jagged and uneven rocky formations protrude randomly from the horizon as if they were drawn by a kindergartner. The sun's rays reflect off the water and into my eyes reminding me of my task. Catching a fish means dinner. Failure would mean hunger. I feel like a Neanderthal, tool in hand, whose infatuations could not extend further than his basic needs. Now, basic need, hunger. My tool is neither stone nor bronze, but graphite. It's a fly rod, and it's my weapon of choice.

I wet my fly line methodically, exploring new waters with each cast. My eyes look on with luminosity and intent; two pearls in a sea of anticipation. The water carries my hope, my excitement, my well being. I tell myself, "I need to fill my bowl."

I was in the middle of the Wild.

In The Wild, there is a feeling of isolation indescribable to people who have never experienced it. There's no sadness. Rather, an unparalleled sense of independence. No computers, no television. Everything is organic. Everything is free. I try to make sense of my surroundings by defining them. But words fall short. Their inflexibility cannot encompass the fluidity of this place. Calling the sky blue and the trees green would do them a disservice. There is so much more than color.

While fishing, I compare myself to my surroundings. How am I like the waterfall above me? As it falls it grows, branching out with diversity. Like my life, it has a definite beginning and an ambiguous ending. I no longer strive to describe my surroundings through definitions but rather through myself.

"Who defines this land?"

"I do."
Arwen 1 / 10  
Jan 14, 2010   #2
...were drawn by a kindergartner kindergardner

Wow...simply wow seriously...clearest pic in my head ever
rapoch 9 / 28  
Jan 15, 2010   #3
My gaze moves from my empty bowl to the window of my tent. I observe the rugged landscape around me. The jagged and uneven rocky formations protrude randomly from the horizon as if they were drawn by a kindergartner. The sun's rays reflect off the water and into my eyes reminding me of my task. Catching a fish means dinner. because these two sentences are related, try using a semi colon instead of a period Failure would mean hunger. I feel like a Neanderthal, tool in hand, whose infatuations could not extend further than his basic needs. Now, basic need, hunger. awkward sentence My tool is neither stone nor bronze, but graphite. It's a fly rod, and it's my weapon of choice.

I wet my fly line methodically, exploring new waters with each cast. My eyes look on with luminosity and intent; two pearls in a sea of anticipation. The water carries my hope, my excitement, my well being. I tell myself, "I need to fill my bowl."

I was in the middle of the Wild.
In The Wild I understand your capitalized "Wild", but why is the "The" capitalized as well? , there is a feeling of isolation indescribable to people who have never experienced it. There's no sadness. Rather, an unparalleled sense of independence. No computers, no television. Everything is organic. Everything is free. I try to make sense of my surroundings by defining them. But words fall short. Their inflexibility cannot encompass the fluidity of this place. Calling the sky blue and the trees green would do them a disservice. There is so much more than color.

While fishing, I compare myself to my surroundings. How am I like the waterfall above me? As it falls it grows, branching out with diversity. Like my life, it has a definite beginning and an ambiguous ending. I no longer strive to describe my surroundings through definitions but rather through myself. this paragraph, to me at least, feels like it was thrown here out of the blue, just to add a more concrete idea of what you are talking about... i dont know how to express what I feel when I read it, but it does not seem to fit here...

"Who defines this land?"
"I do."

Other than that, this is awesome! It is very well written and the imagery is strong! Good job

Could you take a look at my essay? It is due today, so it would mean a lot :) Thanks!


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