Near my home town/ Girl's liberal arts; Barnard /Good match?

How did you first learn about Barnard College and what factors have influenced your decision to apply? Why do you think the College would be a good match for you?

I came across Barnard College when I was searching for colleges near my home town. When I found out that Barnard College was a women's liberal arts college, I was immediately intrigued. Having been in a co-ed school my entire life, I wonder what it would be like to attend an all women school. Being in a school that teaches women to be strong, aspiring and independent leaders is an opportunity that I am willing to take. Despite the fact that we live in the 21st century now, there are still doubts about women being successful leaders. However, with programs like Emerging Leaders Program (ELB) and Barnard Events Board (BEB), Barnard College can help me learn about becoming the best leader possible through different approaches - including event planning. The combination of exclusive women liberal arts education and leadership opportunities make me confident that Barnard is the perfect place to have my college education.

I would not say women's school, but rather women's colleges. Its a thing they say "It's a women's college not an all girl schoo.l" "is an opportunity that I am willing to take" I would say want to. Lastly "Despite the fact that we live in the 21st century now, there are still doubts about women being successful leaders." I would not say doubts about women being leaders, I do not think that is largely true thanks to fabulous women like Hilary Clinton. Rather I would say that women are under represented in leadership positions due to sub conscience basis within our society, or systematic preferences for men in our society.

imo you put too much emphasis on its being a women's college. You might want to write more about other qualities that appeal to you.

can you read mine? Thankyou and happy holidays :)

I like the majority of your essay, however I would add that not only is it a women's college, but it also has reputable classes/majors/etc. that appeal to you as a person. Well written though!