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New York life / Middlemarch' Dorothea - NYU Supplements


ruthyj 3 / 9  
Dec 28, 2011   #1
Why NYU?

Although I have lived in New York my entire life and only an hour away from the city I have not been granted with the opportunity of visiting New York City. The few times that I have, I can remember the feelings that I acquire while being surrounded by crowds of different people and the buildings... The environment is surreal and welcoming, I enjoy it immensely. To attend a college in the city, and at that contains much of the criteria that I look for in a college seems to be unattainable. However, since it is the perfect fit for me I know it must be possible. Attending New York University will help me to discover who I am by being able to experience the opportunities that flourish throughout the University. There are a wide variety of cultures and people that I have never been able to encounter and would love to learn from. The extra curricular activities will assist me in involving myself in new things to try to discover the person that I am, and develop a...person inside of me. One of the programs that I have caught my eye and want to pursue at NYU is the study abroad program. Never being able to visit anywhere outside of the United States, my mother would always tell me "Travel with your mind." I have read of so many places that I wish to visit and learn from and by attending NYU these opportunities and so many more will be obtainable.

What intrigues you? Tell us about one work of art, scientific achievement, piece of literature, method of communication, or place in the world (a film, book, performance, website, event, location, etc.), and explain its significance to you.

In the novel Middlemarch by George Eliot we are shown the inside of a judgemental, high class society circulated with rumors and the main priority being, to become higher in social class.Although this took place in ... this mirrors our society today. We are shown an example of what is a correct lifestyle and are expected to resemble this example. In Middlemarch there is a character who I find appealing because she refused to follow society and choose what she believed to be accurate according to her life. She intrigues me to follow her example. Her name is Dorothea and for a woman of her time she was educated beyond the point where any woman was expected to be educated, and this because she choose to want more for herself. While the lives of the rich and poor were separated, Dorothea attempted to help the less fortunate. One of the most captivating qualities Dorothea posses is being brave enough to follow her heart when everyone is against her judgement. Society forbid Dorothea to marry her true love, for he was poor. When Dorothea marries this man she will loose all of her money and will be looked down upon. Dorothea's bravery to ignore the judgements of others and follow her heart is inspiring. I plan on staying myself through out my entire life despite the views of others, for my moral beliefs are far more important. In order to also be happy I recognize that I must not follow the lead of others but my heart rather. Dorothea intrigues me to travel the path my heart creates.
AbsoluteBliss 5 / 13  
Dec 28, 2011   #2
I would say "I have not been granted the opportunity" - drop the "with." Though, I wouldn't state that you haven't been granted that opportunity, followed by "The few times that I have..."

I hate to say it, but you have some serious work to do. I don't have much time, so I can't correct everything, but you need to work on tense, grammar, and organization.
Strawberry78 4 / 52  
Dec 28, 2011   #3
In first essay:
What are the qualities in which you look for in a school? Why is it the perfect fit? What are qualities of NYU you prefer or enjoy? How will this university help you discover who you are? Be more specific. Your essay sounds to generic. If you can replace NYU with another school, you have not done your job. In the beginning try mention how living just hours from NYU gave you a yearning to want to be involved in that school even more. What extra curricular activities does this school have that you want to be involved in? You need to talk more about NYU and you collectively.

Second Essay:
How is that book any relevant to you as a person. What did you take from the book, not necessarily what was discussed in class. Your second essay is more of a summary analysis. Talk more about yourself in correlation with the book.
andymarie 2 / 11  
Dec 28, 2011   #4
Her name is Dorothea and for a woman of her time she was educated beyond the point where any woman was expected to be educated, and this because she chose to want more for herself.

When Dorothea marries this man she will lose all of her money and will be looked down upon.
Strawberry78 4 / 52  
Dec 28, 2011   #5
Sorry if my comes off a little rude. Just trying to help.
OP ruthyj 3 / 9  
Dec 28, 2011   #6
no thanks alot strawberry78, i took alot of your advice it really helped:)
would you mind reading my other supplement of you could?


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