Question: What academic, educational, or other experiences have you had that provide a foundation for participating in NJIT's Honors College?
Essay:
Academic and extracurricular experiences are two of the significant aspects of my life that motivate me towards going after challenges. My academic foundation range from college courses in engineering, to AP classes, to honors classes. In addition, I have participated in extracurricular activities such as robotics and A.C.E. Mentor (architectural, construction and engineering mentor program), which became a supplement to my interest in engineering and honors related programs.
I believe that education is much like a journey and it is very similar to the journey that Odysseus took in the book "The Odyssey". One has to swim in the sea of obstacles in order to learn something new. During high school, I have taken engineering courses such as introduction to engineering design and principles of engineering which enabled me to gain some insight on the concepts taught in an engineering curriculum at college. I have taken a college course in engineering drawing which taught me how to do architectural and engineering drafting on the computer. These classes broadened my knowledge and were essentially the motivation of my choice in an engineering career. Additionally, these classes increased desire to participate in challenging programs and be a part of active things. I have taken Honors and AP classes such as AP Literature, AP Language, AP Biology, and honors English. I became familiar the challenge that college work involves. After taking one AP and Honors class, I decided to take another, because I had an aspiration to be in a challenge environment. It was an aspiration that made me seek out rigorous things so that I will learn new ideas. After participating in one challenging program, I wanted to relive those moments of constant activity. Now I am accustomed to dealing with difficult tasks and not getting frustrated. I have taken various journeys understanding ideas applied to the world in each class that I have taken, and those experiences made me want to relive those times of intriguing challenges.
I have participated in extracurricular activities such the A.C.E. Mentor program and robotics. Both programs involved several moments of challenges which help me exercise my ability to persevere and face obstacles to the fullest extent. While being in the A.C.E. Mentor program, I was a part of developing many conceptual building designs. There were times when there was a huge work load, all each of those moment were times that I were really involved in understanding things. All the concepts that I learned these programs stimulated my yearn for activates that are constantly active. It allowed me to realize that easy methods in life will not give you the full experience of life. Like in "The Odyssey", it is better to go through a difficult task yourself rather than have someone take you through it every step. My time with robotics and A.C.E. allowed me to have skills of being autonomous and collaborative. These programs strengthened my abilities to transcend from collaboration to times that you just need to tackle a task alone. I have the ability to work with others and work alone when needed and it was all due to participation in something other than what is required by a written curriculum. It is better to go beyond the minimum requirements because it creates more preparation for unsuspected obstacles.
All my experience in academics and even outside created a foundation for my desires to not take the easy path. Rather, I want to go for the challenging road. I have become accustomed to the road of difficulty and it fueled my desires to participate in rigorous programs. My experiences fueled interest in NJIT Honors College, which I believe is full of obstacles. NJIT Honors College appeals to my interest in learning through intriguing classes.
Can you please critique and check over my essay for errors (grammar, problems related to the question or problems related as an admissions essay) I appreciate it..
Thanks
some corrections:
"My academic foundations range from college courses in engineering, to AP classes, to honors classes."
"In addition, I have participated in extracurricular activities such as robotics and the Architectural Construction and Engineering Mentor Program, also known as A.C.E. Mentor, which become a supplement to my interest in engineering and honors related programs."
I became familiar with the challenges that college work involves.
After taking one AP and Honors class, I decided to take another, because I had an aspiration to be in a challenging environment.
It was an aspiration that made me seek out rigorous things so that I would learn new ideas.
All the concepts that I learned through these programs stimulated my yearning for activities that are constantly active.
Just a few minor fixes (above). You could use a stronger closing statement, or change the word "intriguing" to "challenging" to fit in with the rest of the essay.
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