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​Nothing confused me more than downloading a file wirelessly -- Cornell Engineering Essay


jonthom24 1 / 1  
Dec 2, 2015   #1
Prompt: Tell us about an engineering idea you have, or about your interest in engineering. Describe how your ideas and interests may be realized by "and linked to" specific resources within the College of Engineering. Finally, explain what a Cornell Engineering education will enable you to accomplish. (Please limit your response to 650 words.)

This is as far as I got. I don't know where else to go with this so please comment your suggestions!! And correct anything that you feels that needs to be corrected. There's only 405 words so I have a lot of room for editing. Thanks!

​Nothing confused me more than downloading a file wirelessly. I could not grasp the concept that a computer did not have to be directly linked up to the modem to be able to download files. When I was in the sixth grade, my family got our first wireless router. This strange box piqued my interest for the first few weeks after we bought it as I struggled to understand how "wireless" worked. Every day after school ended, I eagerly hurried home to learn and research more about computers.

My interest for computer science transcended after watching the movie The Social Network. One particular scene that engulfed my mind was the scene in which Mark Zuckerburg hacked Harvard's network to obtain pictures for his website that he was creating. During the whole scene, Mark was explaining the process of hacking the websites. I was never so engrossed a film before; it was so foreign yet so intriguing. This scene was the catalyst for my own endeavors to learn code.

As my interest for computer science expanded, my opportunities did not. My school does not offer any computer science courses, so I endeavored to teach myself some basic coding. Of the many resources available online, my main source to learn coding was Codecademy. Here, I learned the basics of HTML and CSS. When I coded my first website, I finally understood what it meant to be a computer scientist. Movies represent about ten percent of what actually occurs when coding. They do not show the grueling time one needs to be proficient in a computer language. After spending twenty cumulative hours learning just the basics of HTML and CSS, I knew had chosen the right path.

To satiate my desire for computers, I look towards Cornell University. With its world-renown research and computer science programs, Cornell would be able to make my dreams become a reality. With its liberal education, I would be able to not only pursue my interest in computer science but also in biology. Cornell's presidentially recognized Diversity Programs have brought thousands of brilliant minds together from all around the world. The vital diversity present at Cornell would make me feel right at home. Lastly, Cornell is home to many bright and dedicated students and faculty. These colleagues will be inspiring and pushing me to reach for more. I know that I will be able to reach my dreams and beyond at Cornell University.

JamieB 2 / 5 1  
Dec 3, 2015   #2
Hey!! I really liked your essay. I felt like it properly answered the prompt and explained very clearly on why your interest in computers led you to want to pursue computer engineering. But there's one part that bothered me a bit:

"One particular scene that engulfed my mind was the scene in which Mark Zuckerburg hacked Harvard's network to obtain pictures for his website that he was creating. During the whole scene Mark was explaining the process of hacking the websites. I was never so engrossed a film before; it was so foreign yet so intriguing."

I feel like because you pointed out the scene in the previous sentence there's no need to include it again. Perhaps you can say " I never been engrossed in a film before as when Mark was explaining etc etc." Or something along those lines. But besides that I thought it was pretty good. I really liked your conclusion.
justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Dec 5, 2015   #3
Jon, I'd like to share my thoughts on your essay.

First paragraph
- first few weeks after we bought it, as I struggled to
- Every day after school endedAfter school
- I eagerly hurried hurry
home to learn and research more about computers.

2nd paragraph
- My interest for computer science transcendedtranspired after watching the movie The Social Network.
- I was never so engrossed to a film before;
- my own endeavors to learn codethe language of coding .

3rd paragraph
- I knew I had chosen the right path.

Final paragraph
- To satiate my desire for computers, I look towards Cornell University. With, with its world-renown
- Cornellthe institution would be able to make

There you have it Jon, I hope my remarks helped!
OP jonthom24 1 / 1  
Dec 8, 2015   #4
Thank you guys so much for your input!!


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