Hey guys this is the supplement essay I wrote for Northwestern and I would really appreciate some feedback!! I'll comment on your essay if you help me out!
Prompt: What are the unique qualities of Northwestern - and of the specific undergraduate school to which you are applying - that make you want to attend the University? In what ways do you hope to take advantage of the qualities you have identified?
Essay:
"If I was in the boondocks... I don't know if it would be too great."
Sitting in my room, listening to Northwestern freshman, "Kira," rave about her personal experiences at Northwestern University, albeit through a Youtube video, could not have convinced me more thoroughly that this university was a place of acceptance, exploration, and opportunities - and a place where I wanted to be. Now, Northwestern is nowhere near the boondocks... and much of its appeal lies in that. Growing up in close proximity to a Metropolitan city, I value the cohesive relationship that Northwestern shares with Chicago. As I gleefully listened to Kira, slowly growing more and more besotted with the university's overall atmosphere, I also recognized the opportunities that are at the fingertips of every student who attends Northwestern. Being interested in a variety of subjects such as English and Sociology, having the resources that Chicago offers with internships galore, museums, and a landscape filled with diversity, would be key in helping me to further immerse myself in my own fascination with human nature.
As I continued to research the university, however, I gradually saw that Northwestern was not only close to a Metropolitan community, but it was also, in its own way, an enclosed Metropolitan community by itself. With students hailing from all of the country - and all over the world - Northwestern was a place where my uniqueness would not only be embraced, but it would be celebrated. Being a bi-racial Chinese-Jewish American, I have always been exposed to varying cultural communities and have, in turn, thrived on this diversity. At Northwestern I would be able to participate and take leadership positions in student-run organizations like Globe, which prides itself on making people aware about global issues, while simultaneously being able to enjoy my love of writing by taking part in a number of Northwestern's literary publications such as Helicon and Triquarterly, and maybe even whip out my witty side with the satirical newspaper The Northwestern Flipside.
The quarter system and the accessibility of the professors would benefit my individual-centered way of learning. In the Weinberg College of Arts and Sciences, I would be able to take my pick out of thousands of courses and the be able to focus on each one of these courses completely in a quarter, rather than over-stretching myself by taking five to six courses in a semester. Working closely with my professors, along with guidance from my freshman advisors, I could even embark on my own research projects with a professor as a resource. The smaller classes in Weinberg would be conducive to my love of small class discussions, and with this well-rounded education in hand, complete with a knowledge of the liberal arts as well as pre-professional training, I know that, with a Northwestern degree, I could leap into the world ready to succeed, equipped with the tools to do so, and with confidence that Northwestern prepared me for anything and everything that comes my way.
Wow, I really wish i could give you lots of suggestions, but i couldn't find many
First suggestion: If you know what you want to major, maybe you could add a sentence on how Northwestern will help you in your specific major.
Second suggestion: I dont know why "Kira" needs quotations.
I really like your essay! Honestly one of the best Northwestern essays I've read.
