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NYU is college with an ambition, teeming with people willing to make a difference to the world


samkazmi 6 / 13  
Dec 27, 2014   #1
NYU is global, urban, inspired, smart, connected, and bold. What can NYU offer you, and what can you offer NYU? (200-400 words)

What makes NYU special? Well, I'd say everything about it, from its unrivalled college experience in one of the greatest cities in the world to its worldwide reputation as a leading academic institution. More importantly, it feels like a college with an ambition, teeming with people willing to make a difference to the world.

NYU provides the opportunity for me to experience a world-class and well-rounded education in the field of chemical and biomolecular engineering. NYU's Polytechnic School of Engineering stands out with its steadily improving ranking, state-of-the-art facilities as well as distinguished faculty members. Add to that the perfect location of NYU at the heart of the Big Apple and I'd have the best place to progress not only as an active and curious student but also as an individual who hopes to push himself to new heights.

Aside from education, I believe that it is important to give back to the community. I spent nearly four years volunteering at an NGO and I spent a significant chunk of that time involved in relief efforts for the 2010, 2011 and 2012 floods in Pakistan, which affected the lives of more than 20 million people all over Pakistan. I got the opportunity to meet some of those people from all over the country; from areas I had no idea even existed. In those times of turmoil, I tried to be a source of strength and support for them. At NYU, I want to continue making a difference to the community by joining clubs that are dedicated towards community service (like the Global Brigades at NYU) as well as taking advantage of the numerous volunteering opportunities available throughout New York. At NYU, I can help on a truly global scale.

NYU's large international student population is also a significant advantage to someone like myself who is always fascinated by people belonging to different cultures and communities. It introduces an individual to new ideas and provides the opportunity to interact with people from all over the world. Being an American who has lived a large part of his life in Pakistan, I believe that I would also be able to add to the diversity and bring a unique perspective to NYU.

At NYU, the possibilities are endless. It offers plenty but in my opinion, so can I. I can offer a voice that is diverse, ambitious and hoping to make a difference.

jricha 2 / 11 1  
Dec 27, 2014   #2
the essay is good, but describes more of what NYU can do for you, not what you can do for them
Ortizsam18 1 / 4 2  
Dec 27, 2014   #3
Very good essay. But remember, you are the one applying to NYU, try to focus more on what you can offer NYU and compare it to what they can offer you. Try to keep a balance between the 2, but you're headed in the right direction.
OP samkazmi 6 / 13  
Dec 27, 2014   #4
I know I don't talk about myself enough. But I'm really close to the word limit so I don't know what to take out from the essay.
Ortizsam18 1 / 4 2  
Dec 28, 2014   #5
Try taking out unnecessary details, like this part..

An 89% job placement rate for its undergraduates is testament to that. Then there is the fact that NYU is located in New York City. NYU is spread throughout the city so in other words, New York City is NYU's campus and you're exposed to the real world as soon as you step out of your classroom onto the streets of New York.
adventoor 3 / 19  
Dec 28, 2014   #6
Very good essay. However, like the people before stated, many unnecessary portions. In particular, the "NYU isn't my first choice" paragraph doesn't add much to the essay. I would advise taking that part out. After you remove those unnecessary details, I think you will have more room for information about what you can bring to NYU and how YOU will improve student life. Also, you repeat the prompt. Like asking yourself the questions "What can NYU get from me?" Im not saying be more subtle, just do not repeat the prompt. Other than that, you have a great essay!

Good luck!


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