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NYU COM. APP-GLOBAL NETWORK/CAMPUS


Karla281995 6 / 15 1  
Dec 30, 2012   #1
NYU's global network provides students with hundreds of academic areas of interest for students to cultivate their intellectual curiosity and to help achieve their career goals. Whether you are entirely undecided about your academic plans or you have a definitive program of study in mind, what are your own academic interests? Feel free to share any thoughts on any particular programs or how you might explore those interests at NYU on any of our campuses.

In our complex society, media is ever-changing. Social media has dictated a whole new audience for news casters. They are no longer producing 5 o'clock shows for people on the other side of a television set, but for people on websites like Facebook and Twitter. In addition, New York is a haven for this multi-media world. New York is the power house of the world providing people with opportunities and the American Dream. I hope to explore my communication skills right in the heart of New York City. Furthermore, I would like to provide breaking news. NYU's Steinhardt fosters the experience needed to reach that dream. First off, the rich, technological advancements in New York will forever adjust to society's changes. The number one research school has a phenomenal academic reputation and encourages its students to influence others globally. The NYU global programs in Prague and Paris specifically have me drawn to the innovative school. I believe that the best way to further my education is by the spread of knowledge. Whether it be the Washington Square News or professional internships, NYU is the school to prepare me for my career field.

Tell us why you have chosen the above campus (using a maximum of 700 characters-spaces and punctuation included).

"You can take the girl out of New York, but you can't take New York out of the girl."

I missed the light of the city even when it was midnight. I missed the colorful faces all of different cultures and backgrounds. Being a native of New York, that is what I yearned for when I moved to a small town. For the dreamers, New York is the place for opportunities. Beneath my feet, I can hear the subway sound. I can see the active members rushing to reach their destinations. New York is a thriving, imaginative city. It is the place that will enrich my curiosity and accept my ideas. In this concrete jungle, this is my canvas just waiting for me to paint my future- to make my mark.

Do I have a unique approach to these? Do I answer the prompt? Grammatical errors? NAME THEM!

Colombiankid94 1 / 4 2  
Dec 30, 2012   #2
First off, i want to thank you for proof reading my essay and reminding me about contractions.

Social media has dictated( introduced? ) a whole new audience for news casters.

They are no longeronly producing 5 o'clock shows for people on the other side of a television set, but for people on websites like Facebook and Twitteralso

- In addition New York, beeing haven for this multi-media world , is the power house of the world providing people with opportunities and the American Dream.

thats it, the rest i belive is great!.

AHHHH i <3 your campus statement! its slightly poetic and i really fell your need to want to go back to NY. i don't have anything to change for that one.
ticklelisaelmo 8 / 42 3  
Dec 30, 2012   #3
Nice essays!
Since other people are telling me this, I'll tell you this too. for the second essay, talk about the uni. hmmm do you have enough characters?

I'm doing NYU also, Read mine?
:)
OP Karla281995 6 / 15 1  
Dec 31, 2012   #4
Ah. That's a good observation. I actually don't think I have enough characters. However, I can try. If not, do you think I should risk it?
ticklelisaelmo 8 / 42 3  
Dec 31, 2012   #5
I wouldn't risk it. Of course, you can talk about the university somewhere else in the other supplement questions. :)
alicederp 10 / 56 4  
Dec 31, 2012   #6
Hi there,

"In addition, New York is a haven for this multi-media world." <-- I think you should change it to "And New York is the haven for this multi-media world."

Your essays both flow very well and answer the prompts without losing the reader's interest. But my suggestion, especially for the first essay, would be to limit the use of words such as "In addition, Furthermore..." it slows down the pace of your essay.

Except for that I really like your writing!
OP Karla281995 6 / 15 1  
Dec 31, 2012   #7
Do you think I need more information about the school in the second one? I stated earlier that it would be hard, but I could try...

Thanks for the feedback!


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