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NYU Supplement " Coming from Upstate NY..." "For me, a hotel is not just a place ..."


codus0320 1 / 1  
Dec 27, 2011   #1
Last minute feedback is greatly appreciated! Any comments about grammar, awkward sentences, minor errors please comment below! :) Thanks!!

Why NYU?

Coming from upstate New York, I am always amazed when I visit New York City and walk by a plethora of tourists flashing their cameras trying to capture the enlightened city. This is the place where I want to learn. This is the place where I am captivated by its charms and uniqueness. The uniqueness comes from tourists and workers coming from all over the world, embracing the genuine celebration of a true global network. New York University offers a myriad of opportunities to enrich one's creativity, global knowledge, diversity, and intellectual pursuits through their globalized perspective in educational goals. I believe New York University gives a tremendous impetus for new discoveries, innovative cultural interactions, and artistic development to the international New York City. In return, the city gives students a vital source of rich communication and a sense of openness to numerous possibilities. This kind of sensational learning experience in the center of most culturally and intellectually diverse surrounding would best fulfill my desires in higher learning education. New York City is the capital of hospitality. Internships and the outstanding study abroad programs will truly enhance my outlook in the international approach to hotel management. NYU's strong connections with leading professionals and major industries in such field would always offer students an excellent foundation despite the rapid development of hospitality management. I strongly believe the cutting edge technology and outstanding faculty will guide me in the right direction on the path I chose to walk on for the rest of my life.

Regardless of whether or not you have an intended major or concentration, please elaborate on an academic area of interest and hos you wish to explore it at NYU's camouses. Please share any activities or experiences you have had that have cultivated your intellectual interests leading you to choose to study at the NYU campus of your choice.

For me, a hotel is not just a place where one sleeps. It is a place where one's curiosity flourishes. Whether it is the architecture or the fine cuisine delivered to your room or the rich history and traditions, a hotel satisfies my creative and eclectic character. When I visited the Peninsula Hotel in New York City and was generously given a tour inside the hotel, I explored the fascinating jobs that made the hotel function. I thought, "Working in a hotel must be like waiting for something new every single day". The world of hospitality is full of exciting yet challenging ideals. I believe hospitality is a business that requires one to be analytical, persuasive, and motivational. A hotel is a place where the world meets, and I am eager to meet people from all across the globe. Living in three different countries led me to appreciate all different kinds of cultures and to love encountering different people with different expectations. My global experiences will truly enhance my performance in studying to become part of one of the largest and growing industries in the world. The Preston Robert Tisch Center for Hospitality, Tourism, and Sports Management offers a comprehensive curriculum in being a successful leader in hospitality management. I will develop a strong customer focus, strong organization skills through challenging courses in accounting and finance, and extraordinary people skills through elaborate communication learned from real working experiences in one of NYU's teaching hotels.
jessie_hamilton 2 / 3  
Dec 27, 2011   #2
Assuming this is for the NYU Supplement on the Common App, the character limit is only 1500, and you're at well over 3,000. You're going to have to cut this down a lot. 1500 characters would be a little more than your first paragraph. Good luck!


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