Regardless of whether or not you have an intended major or concentration, please elaborate on an academic area of interest and how you wish to explore it at NYU's campuses in New York or Abu Dhabi or at one of our global academic centers around the world. Please share any activities or experiences you have had that have cultivated your intellectual interests leading you to choose to study at the NYU campus of your choice.
"I don't know what I want to do." It's a sentence that I have just recently come to terms with saying aloud. For three years of high school, I was dead set on being a broadcast journalist---the perfect balance of my interest in performance, writing, interviewing, and travel. It's what I wanted out of my career as a high school freshmen and what I convinced myself I wanted out of my career senior year.
But now, I have finally broken out of my cage and in many ways my new internship in NYC in the field of pre and post natal wellness has been able to give me that reawakening that I needed. I decided to take this internship because it would give me a taste of a totally different field from the one I had been studying for the last four years at my performing arts high school, but it has provided me something way more significant than that. I have finally had a real taste of New York City.
Surrounded by my peers in a performing arts school who were all interested in auditioning for vocal training, BFA acting programs, and other theatre related universities around the globe made me struggle to decide. "Did I want to pursue a career in the arts after all?" But one day as I strutted to a NYC street performer's drumbeat, I came to the realization that you don't need a studio to perform.
I have learned so much about myself just by having this experience in New York City. Nowadays, I think to myself "Maybe I could be a nurse...or an obstetrician...or...or...or" ...I am still constantly discovering new opportunities. The Hudson River might as well be a border between two different countries because my experiences in NYC have helped me make so many novel discoveries about myself career wise that I would love to see the career paths that NYU's campuses in London, Paris, even Abu Dhabi have to offer me. The truth is---I am not afraid to follow the wrong path because I know that at NYU the world is my stage and lucky for me, there are no dead ends.
I feel as if you're not fully responding to the prompt. You delve into the internship, but let it die off. You mention the conflicting feelings of pursuing something other than performing arts due to your strong background, but even then it's superficial. You have some vivid imagery in there, and i'd keep it, but as for the actual "beef" of the essay, it's missing. This shows great promise of becoming good, but it just didn't hit me right now.
For three years of high school, I was dead set on becoming a broadcast journalist---the perfect balance of my interest in performance, writing, interviewing, and travel.
I decided to take this internship because it would give me a taste of a totally different field from the one I had been studying for the last four years at my performing arts high school, and it has provided me with...
... have helped me make so many novel discoveries about myself career wise, that nowadays I think "maybe I'll be I Douala , or a midwife, or an obstetrician."
NYC has already provided me with the moving experience of birth, and the process of pregnancy and I don't want the end of this internship...
This is why I choose NYU because the bottom-line is, I am undecided about my career choice.
... but I will also be able to back that up with hands on experience, if not in the cultural hearth of NYC then in London, Paris, even Abu Dhabi.
But overall, as a student at New York University I won't be afraid to follow the wrong path because, lucky for me, at NYU there are no dead ends.
Nice ending! Have fun in school!
:)
This is a fun essay to read
it gives good insight into the type of person you are
even you write that you are undeclared, you give hints to a potential major
no one has to be sure what they want to major and you give a pretty good reason why!
I like the direction of the essay. I think it has a cool personal feel. However, I think the title is a little off in comparison to the direction of the essay. Also I get a little confused in the 3rd paragraph. Maybe you should introduce your international desire a little earlier.
If you could please help me with my essay (below) I'd really appreciate it! Thanks!
"I don't know what I want to do." It'sThis is a sentence that I have just recently come to terms with saying aloud. For three years of high school, I was dead set on being a broadcast journalist---the perfect balance of my interest in performance, writing, interviewing, and travel. It's what I wanted out of my career as a high school freshmen and what I convinced myself I wanted out of my career as a senior
There are a few grammatical errors you can probably fix quickly just by re-reading this.
One big thing I noticed though is that you wrote NYC instead of NYU, probably the fault of auto-correct lol, just go back and fix that quickly =)
I think a way to make this a little more engaging would be to tell a story instead of listing your thoughts. Why don't you try to describe, say, an occasion when someone asked you what you wanted to study and you hesitated on the answer. Tell what went on in your head, the memories of your internship, your new love for exploring and NYU.
I hope this helps,
please take a look at my William and Mary essay!
NYC was written on purpose because I was talking about the city itself.
oh oops!! sorry about that how stupid of me
