This is my NYU supplement collection of short answers.
I have had mixed reviews thus far, so I am trying to gain a little bit more perspective.
Any kind of helpful critique would be greatly appreciated!
It should also be noted that I have a profound love of cars.
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Anyway, here goes:
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If you had the opportunity to spend one day in New York City with a famous New Yorker, who would it be and what would you do? (Your New Yorker can be anyone -past or present, fictional or nonfictional - who is commonly associated with New York City; they do not necessarily have to have been born and raised in New York.)
Larry David
I would spend my day with Larry David filming a short documentary on the introspective screenwriter, titled "A Day with Larry." I would capture David's facility for turning the most quotidian, idiosyncratic local events, into psychological treatises with universal appeal. I would want to experience micro-events with him, such as the injustices experienced in cramped cross-town bus and convey them as macro-occasions with the neurotic proclivity inherent to the character of New York City.
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Write a haiku, limerick, or short (eight lines or less) poem that best represents you.
I am
Like an automotive masterpiece
Designed in Modena,
Engineered in Munich,
And driven along the Riviera.
I am
A product of multiples,
The best of all worlds,
For skill in tongue and numbers,
I set the benchmark.
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In the year 2050, a movie is being made of your life. Please tell us the name of your movie and briefly summarize the story line.
Going Green
David's entrepreneurial spirit and environmentally sound business ethics have fulfilled him professionally but he yearns for more. He rekindles his childhood dream of becoming a race-car driver, and aims for the deadly Nurburgring, infamously known as the "Green Hell." He builds his own environmentally sound car but the media declares it a cover for emission questions at his lucrative factories. Refusing to justify his intentions and fueled by his innocence, he qualifies, he races. Does he win?
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Please tell us what led you to select your anticipated academic program and/or NYU school/college, and what interests you most about your intended discipline.
I have always been grateful for my bilingual English and Turkish upbringing. These languages were the building blocks that facilitated my French and Spanish studies, which I began at the age of four. My skills in languages have helped define who I am personally, academically and who I strive to be professionally. I believe that my aptitude will facilitate my aspirations for a career in International Business as my anticipated program at the Stern School of Business.
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In addition to any work experience that you listed on your application, please tell us how you spent your most recent summer vacation.
After working as an intern at the Four Seasons in Canary Wharf, I traveled to France and Turkey for two weeks on a personal cultural mission in order to experience the authenticity of daily life. My days were filled with interacting with the heart and soul of Provence and Istanbul, the people themselves, which gave me a privileged view into the subtleties of the languages and the nuances of each culture, and I was inspired by the harmony of difference created by both cultures.
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Thanks for reading!
I really like the poem... For skill in tongue and numbers...you must excel in english and math?
Thanks for commenting.
I was trying to get across my skill in foreign languages.
Is there better approach for that?
I'm really impressed with your work. you have a very strong vocabulary and really a good control of your language. I found pretty much zero grammatical errors. I have to agree, the poem is awesome. you do a good job of incorporating your interests, complimented by good word choice.i really like the film about your life in 2050, including the nurburgring. As with this, and also the Larry David piece, you do a fantastic job of letting the university know who you are through creative and original writing. I think you did fine with the letting them know about your interest in foreign language, and you definitely incorporated your love of cars (i'm with you on that one). This is some really good stuff, really unique, and not too wordy. I am curious though, what is the length requirement? even though you included a lot about yourself, im just wondering if maybe you had more room you could expound on some of the subjects more. overall, I am very impressed and i think you'll go far with what you have. Good luck!!
ahh, you're the first person I know of that's applying to the same NYU major as me *high-fives for healthy competition* :D I have a lot of the same language-related ideas and such.
alrighty so, overall your answers are very creative [:
A few things IMHO:
1 - your answer to #1 seems a bit wordy D: all great word choices, but I think it burdens the general message a bit. Even a word or two changed would make it read better.
2 - for the movie question, the "declares it a cover for emission questions at his lucrative factories" is a bit confusing. I'm not sure exactly what you mean x__x but that could just be me being superficial and not reading carefully.
- for the activities response, this sentence: "My days were filled with interacting with the heart and soul of Provence and Istanbul, the people themselves, which gave me a privileged view into the subtleties of the languages and the nuances of each culture, and I was inspired by the harmony of difference created by both cultures." - seems a bit run-on-esque.
Otherwise, good job, and good luck! I hope we get in ;]
The last one. What did you do as an intern? Did it have to do with your major? You might want to give at least a general description of that to give them more insight into you. Is your major a specialty of NYU? Are they "known" for that major? if so list it!
Otherwise, I'd say perfect! excellent vocabulary!
Thank you all for your insight.
Unfortunately, the character limit on the Common App is strictly 500, which translates to about 80 words for me. The sight cuts me off if I'm even one character over, which is infuriating.
At my internship I worked in the kitchen as a line cook, up in the restaurant as a waiter, then room service, and front office. I did the internship to get some work experience in general, not necessarily for hotels (although I really enjoyed it, and I am considering some options). I'm thinking about changing my intended major away from strictly business and making a move for Arts and Sciences.
I really like your documentary idea! I'm considering going crazy in mine. kinda like slyvia plath/Emily Dickinson-ish. Your poems is also very good. over all...Awesome.
