It's a good essay.... :)
I only have a few suggestions for you...
My parents left China to come to the United States several years before I was born to create a better life for their future children.
i feel as if this sentence would sound better had it been broken down to two.
My parents left China long before i was born. They moved to the US so that their future children will have a better life.. We were to livestay with my mother's family in China for almost two months.
It made
allowed me
to realize how much my mother has sacrificed for my brother and me.
my parents saved up enough money to let my brother and
and myself travel to China by ourselves.
The weather was sticky and hot unlike my home city's "perfect weather" in San Diego, California.
... There is something odd about this sentence. Try this..
The weather was sticky and hot unlike the "perfect weather" in San Diego. ... This sort of tells the reader that you are from San Diego.
hope my suggestions helped.. :)