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NYU PERSONAL STATEMENTS , Major and Famous New Yorker


Alhadhrami 1 / -  
Dec 31, 2009   #1
I know it is too late but i really need help please do review it

PERSONAL STATEMENTS

If you had the opportunity to spend one day in New York City with a famous New Yorker, who would it be and what would you do? (Your New Yorker can be anyone - past or present, fictional or non-fictional - who is generally associated with New York City; they do not necessarily have to have been born and raised in New York City.

Nothing would be more pleasant than spending one day in New York City with a passionate, enthusiastic and resilient man like Donald Trump. I admire how he turns failure to success. Over viewing Manhattan from the top of the Trump world tower and listening to his story would be very intriguing. After having a walk in Central Park, Later I would challenge him in a game of Golf where he could tell me more about his experience. Finally, I would ask him where he got the insight of his words: "In the end, you're measured not by how much you undertake but by what you finally accomplish".

Please tell us what led you to select your anticipated academic program and/or NYU school/college, and what interests you most about your intended discipline.

I am a person who finds satisfaction in helping others and seeing how people live in Yemen makes me even more determined to make a change in their lives. Therefore, I decided to pursue economics as a major. In Yemen half of the people live below poverty line, unemployment is very high, and corruption is widespread. My interest in economics grew out of concern for improving public policy. I am a problem solver who thinks from a wide perspective and always finds creative solutions to challenging Problems.
jubajum 2 / 4  
Dec 31, 2009   #2
"After having a walk in Central Park, Later I would challenge him in a game of Golf where he could tell me more about his experience."--not sure if you took out a phrase, but take out Later.

I like your second prompt, but is there a greater connection to Yemen, it feels as if you could replace Yemen with any country.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Jan 8, 2010   #3
Over v Viewing Manhattan from the top of the Trump world tower and listening to his story would be very intriguing.

Don't capitalize golf.

Tell what you have in common with Trump.

I am a person who finds satisfaction in helping others, and seeing...

:-)
umulbaneen 4 / 27  
Jan 8, 2010   #4
change "I admire how he turns failure to success." into
"I admire how he turns failure into success."

but generally your first answer is very vague
when they say write about a new-yorker
their not trying to measure that persons greatness but yours--you need to highlight yourself more
be more comprehensive as to why u want donald trump --how he relates to you-- try highlighting your own qualities by the help of donald trump

like maybe instead of just stating donalds quote...try somehow answering it via your life experiences or something

goodluck


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