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NYU Personal Statements (6 questions and answers)


brood910 5 / 14  
Dec 29, 2008   #1
1) Describe a trait or characteristic that has been passed along to you by your family. Tell us why you like or dislike this aspect of yourself. (500 or less characters)

I am a striver and so is my mother. If there is something that I want to attain, then I must get it. I do whatever it takes to achieve it. My counselor always has told me that I am the hardest worker that she has ever seen in her life. When I was a junior, to make the highest honor roll, I spent at least 4 hours a day at home on school work. As might be expected, I made it for both first and second semesters. I like to be a hard worker because I usually do not fail to accomplish my goals.

2) You have been selected to sing in a talent show. What song would you choose? Why?

I would sing G.O.D.'s "To my mother". It is a Korean song that has inspired so many Asian singers to come to Korea. This song is about a mother who dedicates her life to her son. Her son regrets that he has lived his life so wastefully, and he finally realizes the importance of his mother when she dies. By singing this song, I would not only be able to show Korean cultures, but also remind people of the sacrifices that their mothers made for them.

3) Please tell us what led you to select your anticipated academic program and/or NYU school/college, and what interests you most about your intended discipline.

My passion to be a doctor has developed since my dog died of kidney failure. At first, I wanted to be a veterinarian to find the cure for kidney failure for dogs, but my allergic reactions to animals stopped me from expanding my dream. Instead, I decided to dedicate my life to human patients. From losing my own dog, I learned that losing loved ones is the most difficult experience for everyone. The intense feelings that only doctors get when they save lives always have interested me most.

4) New York City is an essential element of academic and cultural life at NYU. If you could engage in an activity or start a club or service organization at NYU, what would it be and how would you envision it impacting the larger community?

Having experienced poverty myself, I would like to organize a community service club. Because I know how it feels to be poor and isolated by the society, I love to work with other people for homeless children and other needy people. Also, by opening some public events such as a marathon, the club would encourage more people to volunteer. This would surely diminish the rate of poverty in the United States. Additionally, this would give people of NYU insights into the disadvantaged people's lives.

5) In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience)(150 words or fewer).

Volunteering at the animal hospital for one year helped me learn about the real world. I went to the All Pets once a week for an eight hour shift. The usual tasks that I had to do were cleaning the shelters, walking all the dogs, preparing tools for surgeries, organizing charts, delivering messages from the veterinary technicians to the veterinarian, and so on. Before working at the hospital, I did not know what I really wanted to do in the future. However, I realized that saving lives would be my job when I saw tears coming out of a client's eyes. The client's dog suffered from kidney failure, and unfortunately, it died. I felt strong emotions that aroused a passion in my heart to be a doctor. Therefore, working at the hospital helped me realize the importance of my loved ones, and my dream.

6)In addition to any work experience that you listed on your application, please tell us how you spent your most recent summer vacation.

I volunteered at an animal hospital for 76 hours in summer of 2007. I learned many basic surgical processes from helping the veterinarian get prepared for surgeries; I prepared surgical tools for him. In summers of 2007 and 2008, I went to the Stevens Institute of Technology to compete with other students in building robots. Lastly, I did fundraising with my church youth group. We did concerts for many churches before their worship services. We did many other things such as bake sale as well.
Linnus 6 / 89  
Dec 29, 2008   #2
For the last short response it asks you how you spent your MOST RECENT summer vacation IN ADDITION to any work experience. I believe work experience would include any volunteering jobs. Most importantly, I believe that NYU wants to know what do you do other than the things you list in your activity records.

#4
"I would like to organize a community service club."
Are you sure that NYU does not already have a community service club? I would pick a more specific name.

"Because I know how it feels to be poor "="Having experienced poverty myself"

Also all your responses seem rather short (maybe it's not since I didn't count the characters). I would try to use at least 450 characters out of the 500 characters offered.
OP brood910 5 / 14  
Dec 30, 2008   #3
all of them are over 450 characters..
Linnus 6 / 89  
Dec 30, 2008   #4
Haha, you are right. I didn't realize that it included the space too!
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Dec 30, 2008   #5
I am a striver and so is my mother. If there is something that I want to attain, then I must get it. I do whatever it takes to achieve it.

Start with this part:

My counselor always has told me that I am the hardest worker that she has ever seen in her life. This quality comes from my mother, who taught me that, when there is something that I want to attain, then I must do whatever it takes to achieve it. When I was a junior, to make the highest honor roll, I spent at least 4 hours a day at home on school work. As might be expected, I made it for both first and second semesters. I like to be a hard worker because I usually do not fail to accomplish my goals.

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As I grew older, I decided to dedicate my life to human patients.

Wow, all of this is very good. Above, those are the only suggestions I have. Nice job! You should show these to your mother, so that she can take pride in how impotant she is to you.
OP brood910 5 / 14  
Dec 30, 2008   #6
Thank you so much, kevin!


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