I found these supplements quite hard as the word count is severely limited and every one else seems to have a similar generic answer? Is there any suggestions to alter mine a bit and make it maybe more personal? Any critique is appreciated, harsh welcomed! I shall look at your essays in return as well.
What led you to select your anticipated academic area of study at any of the colleges at NYU?What interests you the most about your discipline ,mention any extracurriculars that show your interest. (500 characters)
Growing up, I have absorbed countless pieces of information that media has fed to me through various mediums. Slowly, my interest in media developed from only pure entertainment purposes, to a keen awareness for the "behind-the-scenes" work. Among completion of various programs at the local television and radio station, as well as involvement with the 2010 Winter Olympics Programming Team, I am more convinced that this is the path I want to explore. Media delivers all to the world. I want to take part in that sending. I believe that NYUCAS is not only the only option, but it is best option.
What does the concept of global network university mean to you? How do you think studying in NYU, OR ANY SITE would change you as a person and equip you to build cross cultural relationships at NYU and beyond?
I have travelled to at least eight different countries and been through numerous cities. The concentrated facts I learn from the tour guides, however, is not enough for me. I wish to learn a culture of a location. The slang, the "informal rules" and even the little bargaining tricks are what appeal to me. That is what NYU's global network university offers. It is at NYU where I can truly absorb and apply the universal values that I have obtained and forward that to myself in the future. Only NYU would allow me to stand at one point, and absorb from all sides.
Bring any person past/present to anywhere SPECIAL TO YOU , who and why? (NYU)
With his speech "I Have a Dream" Martin Luther Junior defied what was deemed as conventional and sent his message tenaciously. For that, he is my hero. More than anything, I would want to bring him to Canada, my country, a country accepting of refugees; a country where diversity roams freely, and make him see his dream realized. Because of people like him, civilians like me no longer worry about racial discrimination; I can know and love people of various skin tones; I can learn from the assorted cultures. I want to demonstrate to him the immense change that he took part in, and the success of that revolution
I want to take part in that sending.
...take part in that
delivery ...
I believe that NYUCAS is not only the only option, but it is best option.
only is redundant, reword it so the sentence will be able to flow better.
The second one is great.
More than anything, I would want to bring him to Canada, my country, a country accepting of refugees; a country where diversity roams freely, and make him see his dream realized.
The sentence is a slight run-on with the use of commas. Perhaps something like this..
More than anything I would want to bring him to my country Canada; a country accepting of refugees and a country where diversity roams freely. I want to make him see that his dream is realized.
Good Luck!
The three of them are very well-written.
Only one comment to add though:
I believe that NYUCAS is not only the only option, but it is best option.
If something is the ONLY option, how can it be the BEST option? The BEST among what, there are no other options! I think the sentence is a bit wishy washy (removing "I believe" will make it more confident) and meaningless. I would say: NYUCAS is my best option; it is the only college capable of helping me achieve this goal.
