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One way Babson defines itself is through the notion of creating great economic and social value everywhere. How do you define yourself?
I would like to define myself as an odd combination of dreamer, brutal realist and pragmatist. Since I have strong interest in Chinese traditional handicraft, especially fabric arts, I always have the dream of introducing Chinese traditional handicraft culture to everyone around the me and further to everywhere all over the world. Honestly, the dream is fantastic (I believe) but the reality is always brutal. I once naively thought if I establish a Chinese traditional handicraft club in high school, everyone should have the responsibility to join and learn some traditional handicraft skills since these skills represent our own culture. However, there were only few students attended my club. Perplexed by the unexpected result, I reflected my plan to figure out the reason and finally turned my vision to reality. I realized that setting up a club was like opening a business, I had to provide what students truly want and to advertise the goal of my club. Hence, I went to pragmatize my big and seemingly unrealistic dream. By surveying what particular skill or concept of Chinese traditional culture they were interested in, delivering presentations and putting up posters, I successfully attracted one half of students in the school to participate in my club. As shown in this case, "Dare to think, dare to make it real" is what I think that can best describe me.
Yuhan, the main point of the essay is to describe your personality in terms of work ethic, cultural recognition, and abilities, all summed up into one definition. Most of what you depicted in your essay is a description of who you are, which is highly different from the definition of who you are as a person. This is somewhat of a tricky question to answer because defining who you are on paper really tends to end up being a description instead. Here is what I suggest that you do, reflect upon who you are as a person. What are your beliefs, opinions, and most importantly, what matters do you? When combined, do these factors come together to create an idea of who you are as a person? If the answer is yes, then format your response in the same manner. In effect, you can write the essay by starting off with (a sample template) ;
How do I define myself? I am a person who believes that... because my opinion is that...which is why... matters to me the most. This is who I am as a person, this is what defines me as a human being.
Or some other words to that effect.
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