"Imagine looking through a window at any environment that is particularly significant to you. Reflect on the scene, paying close attention to the relation between what you are seeing and why it is meaningful to you. Please limit your statement to 300 words."For anyone else reading, that's the prompt this was written from.
And, a few days later, we found out.
Try omitting this sentence for 8 words,
The coach of the team, as on all the teams, was the father of one of the players. His daughter happened to play the same position as I did, and therefore, I couldn't make the team.
(this is 36 words)
combining these sentences to shorten them (e.g. "
The team coach's daughter played the same position as I did and chose her over me.") for another 20 or so words,
However, I soon discovered that my passion and love for soccer far outweighed any frustration and disappointment, and I didn't have to be on the A-team to play. So, when I drive by Fisher Meadows now, I look out the window and see my team. Not the A-team I expected to be on, but the B-team that turned out to have been the best teams soccer could have given me.
(70 words)
and combining some of these well (e.g. "
The frustrating disappointment of not making the 'A' team did not keep me from playing however, and I continued to love and enjoy soccer with a team that turned out to have been the best teams soccer could have given me. When I imagine a look out the car window while driving on Old Farms Road, I can see the fields where I chased my passion.") for another reduction (bad example sentence I guess, only four words less).
the B-team that turned out to have been the best teams soccer could have given me.
I don't really understand this sentence though.
Good luck with the rest of your resizing process.