"one should never stop learning" - SHORT Admission application essay

RULES: Please provide a statement (250 words minimum) that addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve.

My Writing:

My main objective for attending college and reasons why I'm choosing to transfer into a university is to further my education and to stay persistent on the theory of "one should never stop learning". I know that my future is never to far away, and college is the key or groundwork that leads me to a successful fruitful life and all other future endeavors I might pursue. I have reached my potential at a community college and received two degrees, one in Business Administration and the other in Social Science. The most logical step for my well-being is to transfer into an institution appropriate for my good intentions. Transferring is the most beneficial move I can make right now at this point in my life. So choosing a good university to transfer into is crucial.

I had a conversation once with the President of Crafton Hills Community College, Mrs. Gloria Macias Harrison. When I asked her about college and its impact on a students' future, she confidently replied "College is only about theory, its how you apply it to the workplace that matters". This statement scared me for some reason, after reviewing it in thought, I realized, I could surely apply any theory I've known and give it all of my heart, but its good theory, good knowledge and a good school that will take me places. Finding a good school that would stimulate my mind with good theory is what put fear in me, but I fear no more cause I believe I found it.

I am by no means an expert writer, but what you have written down is very convincing, i love the incorporation of the quote from the president of the school. Great read!

One thing is you have to explain your objectives you want to achieve, are they "finding a good school to stimulate my mind" matbe highlight the objectives more clearly.

this means a lot. Thank you for the help.