Here, I am satisfying my unquenchable thirst for knowledge with the metaphorical pineapple smoothie that represents exploring new ideas.
nice!
I think you can find a way to express these ideas that is more original, more clever:
...students who have in common a love of learning and preference for collaboration....(Lots of schools have students like this. You have to say something about a particular building or group or resource, etc. as Stanford.
Diversity makes these ideas interesting. Stanford represents over 90 countries, 50 states, and thousands of points of view. ----- getting a little brochure-ish, can you think of a brilliant and ticklingly unexpected way to express this idea?
:-) I like the feedback you give other people, Gnu, thanks for participating!
Oh, I have an idea... use this as a way to cut characters: Diversity makes these ideas interesting. Stanford represents over 90 countries, 50 states, and thousands of points of view----all the INFORMATIONAL stuff in an essay is the stuff that weighs it down. A strong essay is one that promotes one big idea and gives a lot of EXPERIENCE for the reader with action verbs and sensory words. :-)