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this is way over the limit (100 characters more) so I will shorten it up it'd be great if I could get some help on that as well as grammar check and thoughts!
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What would you say if you had an opportunity to talk to the devil? Initially I must clarify I am not a satanic individual and I do not believe in inflicting beliefs on other people, everybody is entitled to their own opinions and faith. In today's day and age with nuclear proliferation, wars, terrorism, economic crises; everybody is in search of God. But has anyone really wondered that if a Satan existed what he would have to say? I suppose the first thing I would like to ask is if this was all predetermined, that this highway to hell (pun intended) human kind is on is it just an orchestration? And if so, would that mean that all of us have submitted to the evil within us and lost sight of the good. What about all the people who pray every day, who remain loyal to their faith the few who still believe in miracles, are they just being hoaxed? It is true that people are altruistic in this world, the concept of charity does exist but how far is it really taking us, for every good deed there are five bad deeds and so eventually we either end up where we started or far behind. It is a vicious cycle. Dante travelled through hell and through his log we know that in many ways Hell too holds a justice system, you are punished in accordance with your crime. Yet how do we explain the natural catastrophes for instance Hurricane Katrina, the floods in Pakistan; one might blame it on global warming, climate change, going even as far as evolution or, maybe, this is our punishment. And what cataclysmic punishments they are, yet we do not seem to learn. The apathy still continues, the decline still continues. I suppose the one thing we all really fear if we got the chance to converse with the devil would be finding out this was not all part of his plan; that no matter how powerful his wrong doings may be, the catastrophe we have inflicted on ourselves is far great than anything evil itself might wish upon us.
Hey, I'm not sure that I am a good helper with grammar, since I'm not a native speaker, but anyway tell us is your prompt first of all, and I'll try to make some suggestions!
The prompt is- Stanford students are widely known to possess a sense of intellectual vitality. Tell us about an idea or an experience you have had that you find intellectually engaging
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What would you say if you had an opportunity to talk to the devil? Initially I must clarify I am not a satanic individual ( satanist will save the space) and I do not believe in inflicting beliefs on other people, everybody is entitled to their own opinions and faith. In today's day I In our modern world with its nuclear proliferation, wars, terrorism, economic crises; everybody is in search of God. But has anyone really wondered that if a Satan existed what he would have to say? (it is not good to start sent. with but) I suppose the first thing I would like to ask is if this was all predetermined, that this highway to hell (pun intended) human kind is on is it just an orchestration? (as for me this sent is too complex) And if so, would that mean that all of us have submitted to the evil within us and lost sight of the good. What about all the people who pray every day, who remain loyal to their faith the few who still believe in miracles, are they just being hoaxed? It is true that people are altruistic in this world, the concept of charity does exist but how far is it really taking us,( split these sentences) It is a vicious cycle, because for every good deed there are five bad deeds and so eventually we either end up where we started or far behind. Dante travelled through Hell and through his log we know that in many ways Hell too holds a justice system, Hell you are punished in accordance with your crime. Yet how do we noone knows exactly how to explain the natural catastrophes for instance Hurricane Katrina, the floods in Pakistan; one might blame it on global warming, climate change, going even as far as evolution or, maybe, this is our punishment. And what cataclysmic punishments they are, yet we do not seem to learn. The apathy still continues, the decline still continues. I suppose the one thing we all really fear if we got the chance to converse with the devil would be finding out this was not all part of his plan; that no matter how powerful his wrong doings may be, the catastrophe we have inflicted on ourselves is far great than anything evil itself might wish upon us.A run on sentence!
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Your topic is interesting, because it brings the reader to meditation about life.
hi! thanks a lot for that it really helped
I haven't got any thoughts about it yet though, I know its a little bit of a different take on the topic but its true to an idea I do find intellectually engaging
what do you all think????
please reply!
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Can someone pleeeeease tell me what they think of my essay? :( should I change it? edit some bits?
THOUGHTS PLEASE!! :(
Initially I must clarify I am not a satanic individual and I do not believe in inflicting beliefs on other people, everybody is entitled to their own opinions and faith. ----You say 2 things in this sentence, and they are unrelated. I think maybe this sentence should be omitted. The disclaimer distracts attention away from the point of the essay.
In today's day and age with nuclear proliferation, wars, terrorism, economic crises; everybody is in search of God. Everybody was beofre this day and age, anyway...
But has anyone really wondered that if a Satan existed and what he would say about...
...far greater than...
This essay tries to express more meaning than can be expressed in a short space like this. It has a lot of potential, but I think you should choose ONE of the themes you use and focus on it. Eliminate distractions, and focus on one of the ideas you are sharing.
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