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"Organized chaos" - Stanford mini essay 250 words: Future roommate


josekada 1 / 1 2  
Dec 18, 2015   #1
Stanford Essay Prompt:

Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate -- and us -- know you better. (250 word limit)

Organized chaos is definition of my room. One moment you'll see books scattered randomly on a table, the blanket hanging off the bed like a curtain. But the next, you'll wonder whether room service paid our room a surprise visit. It will be spic and spam.

One moment I will be engrossed in the implications and applications of what I have learned. The next I will be asking u which of life's mysteries we should ponder over a bag of crisps, or which YouTube video we must lampoon over. But no matter what kind of situation arises, I will be the guy with the goofy smile. I try to find enjoyment in whatever I do. And that includes side splitting pranks. Don't be surprised if you get a 'genuine' Valentine's Day candy gram from you crush.

But don't get me wrong- when it comes to food, I am a perfectionist. You shouldn't be surprised to see me mixing dozens of powders in my bolognaise to get just that right taste. If something just doesn't tantalize my taste buds, I won't be afraid to make it known.

One thing I don't discern over is personalities and preferences. No matter how contrasting our views are, I'm sure we will find a way to maintain an atmosphere that is as conducive to working as it is ecstatic and intriguing. What is it that provokes your curiosity? What kind of character are you?
kerry2654 13 / 37 12  
Dec 18, 2015   #2
Organized chaos is definition of myour future room. One moment, you'll see randomly scattered books and a blanket hanging off my bed like a curtain.- add another example of the clutter

The next moment, however, you'll wonder whether room service paid us a surprise visit. It will be spic and spam.- add an example of the cleanliness.

One moment I could either be engrossed in the implications and applications of what I have learned or . The next I will be asking you which of life's mysteries we should ponder over a bag of crisps.

I think you should focus a lot more on what kind of roommate you'll be rather than talking about the room. Also, I'm not sure how you speak normally, but some words just sound like synonyms of commonly used ones. Try to sound more comfortable.
vangiespen - / 4,134 1449  
Dec 18, 2015   #3
Hi Joe :-) Your letter makes me believe that your life with your roommate can be the subject of a comedy reality show :-D Good work. It is sure to make your roommate feel at ease and most likely, create a best friend for life for both of you. That is always the aim of these kinds of letters, to make sure that you place each other at ease mentally, prior to your actual move in. You accomplished just that in this letter, but it can use a little polish just to make sure ;-)

Organized chaos is THE definition of my room. One moment you'll see books scattered randomly on a table, the NEXT, A blanket WILL BE hanging off the bed like a curtain. But the next, THEN, THERE WILL BE TIMES WHEN you'll wonder whether room service paid our room a surprise visit. It will be spic and spam.

One moment I will be I HAVE A TENDENCY TO BE engrossed in the implications and applications of what I have learned.BUT WITH LEARNING COMES A BREAK, SO EXPECT ME TO will be asking u YOU (ALWAYS SPELL OUT AND COMPLETE YOUR WORDS AND SENTENCES. YOU ARE NOT POSTING TO A SOCIAL MEDIA SITE.) ASK YOU ABOUT which of life's mysteries we should ponder over a bag of crisps, or which YouTube video we must lampoon over . But no NO matter what kind of situation arises, I will be the guy with the goofy smile. I try to find enjoyment in whatever I do. And , AND that includes side splitting pranks. Don't be surprised if you get a 'genuine' Valentine's Day candy gram from you crush. 9NO NEED OT CLUE IN YOUR ROOMMATE, WHY SPOIL THE SURPRISE?)

But don'tget me wrong- when WHEN it comes to food, I am a perfectionist. SO You YOU shouldn't be surprised to see me mixing dozens of powders in my bolognaise to get just that right taste. If something just doesn't tantalize my taste buds, I won't be afraid to make it known. SO BE PREPARED FOR A CULINARY JOURNEY DURING THE SEMESTER. REST ASSURED NEITHER OF US WILL EVER LACK FOR FOOD, I'LL MAKE SURE OF THAT.

One thing I don't discern over is ARE personalities and preferences. No matter how contrasting our views are, I'm sure we will find a way to maintain an atmosphere that is as conducive to working AND FRIENDSHIP IN AN as it is ecstatic and intriguing WAY. What is it that provokes your curiosity? What kind of character are you?


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