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'her parent's divorce was for the best' - Apply Texas


babyqu33ns 1 / -  
Dec 24, 2008   #1
I need some help...Im kind of stuck bc i dont know what to write about. This topic isnet really specific... so any ideas???
I have to turn in this essay by Dec. 26... ANd i havent started yet. So please help! Thank you :D

The prompt is:

There may be personal information that you want considered as part of your admissions application. Write an essay describing that information. You might include exceptional hardships, challenges, or opportunities that have shaped or impacted your abilities or academic credentials, personal responsibilities, exceptional achievements or talents, educational goals, or ways in which you might contribute to an institution committed to creating a diverse learning environment.

I recall the night she called me on the phone and said it ended. Seventeen plus years of her parent's marriage finally came to a halt. What would happen to her and her younger brothers? Would she stay with her mother and live in the same home or would everything she know abruptly change? She explained that no matter what happens, side by side or half way across the globe, we would always remain friends. It should have been me comforting and assuring her, but it was Kim, the sensible one who kept her head straight in a crisis situation constantly looking toward the bright road ahead. As I listened to Kim on the phone, I knew she attempted to conceal her pain because of the bombardment of trivial questions she started to ask me, "How was school, did I talk to the guy I liked, did I finish my homework?" I wanted to tell her I did not care about my life at the moment, and all that mattered was her happiness and how I would be able to ease the pain. Kim's voice sounded very composed, but I knew her too well to let her faïade off the hook. I would continue to stay on the phone until I was ensured she would be okay enough to fall asleep.

As we chatted, Kim guaranteed her parent's divorce was for the best. In the last couple of years, they had constant problems without conclusions. One problem ended, another one began as it doubled in complexity. The only way to fix anything, a divorce would be needed. The time came for her parents to go their separate ways in order to resolve the issues. Kim explained, for the stability of the family, her mother decided to remain with her and her younger brothers, and that way it would keep the brothers in one place to make it easier since they would have each other for comfort.

I listened intensely as I felt Kim's emotions drift through the phone in my hand to my heart. I felt the weight coming off her shoulders with every sentence as her voice became steadier and steadier. Although the divorce caused her pain, it seemed by the time our conversation finished, the pain mitigated slightly. I could only guess why she felt better. Bottling up every pain, thought, and emotion never helps with healing.

Kim thanked and appreciated me before our conversation ended. I told her I did not do much, but of course, she had to state I did everything I could. She explained that all she needed was a friend to talk with who would listen to her feelings and that the best things in life are friends who catch you when you fall. You learn to value friends who are there for you and know that they will be with you through thick and thin. The divorce would not let Kim's state of mind drown in misery. Instead, it made her stronger and gave her the strength to develop powerful bonds between us. It gave her a new outlook on life and that life goes on despite hardships. It guided her to focus more on school for a better future.

Kim made an impact on my life by showing me how much one person can appreciate you for little things. Through this, I learned to treasure my friends closer and realized further how friendship could keep a person from losing themselves in terrible situations. Kim demonstrated to me that by having a genuine friend who listens, could make all the difference in the world. They do not have to offer advice, but merely an open ear and heart. I reflect upon myself a lot more positively and see that life goes on regardless of hardships. It is just the matter of how you cope with situations and whom you let into your life to share situations with. I know one hundred percent that Kim will be there for me as I have for her, because friendship is the remedy to a healing soul.

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Any suggestions...This is not on the topic from the 1st post. This is one essay i wrote for college admission. Good or bad suggestions are great. Thanks.

EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Dec 26, 2008   #2
Nice job with this essay, and with being such a good, strong friend.

It should have been me comforting and assuring her, but this was Kim, the sensible one who kept her head straight in a crisis situation constantly looking toward the bright road ahead.

It is just the matter of how you cope with situations and with whom share experiences.

Oops, you can't have a remedy for a soul.. it has to be a little different, for example:

I am one hundred percent sure that Kim will be there for me as I have for her, because friendship is the medicine that expedites the healing of a wounded soul.


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