Take your essay, print it off, then crumple it into a little paper ball and throw it into your trash can.
Okay, so that isn't strictly necessary, but just deleting it doesn't have the same bitter satisfaction to it. In any event, you need to start over. Your essay tells us that your parents cared about you, helped you with your homework, and imparted their values to you. I don't care. The admission's officers don't care. Most likely, no one else besides you and parents will care. This is
normal for people who are applying to university. It won't apply to all of the applicants, of course, but by and large, one of the main reasons people do well enough in school to be able to apply to university is because they have a family that loves and supports them. You need to come up with some way your family, culture, or environment has shaped you in a way that is a bit (or better yet, a lot) different from all of the other candidates. Was there a particular lesson or value your parents taught you that you can describe through a narrative incident? What is your cultural background? How has it defined you? Where did you grow up? How did that affect you? Brainstorm and come up with a more original approach to this essay.
I wonder how many others will start their essays with something like this.
83.3%. It's a statistic, so it must be true.