"My passion for creating"; what attracts you specifically to your field of study?

Columbia: For applicants to The Fu Foundation School of Engineering and Applied Science, please tell us what from your current and past experiences(either academic or personal) attracts you specifically to the field or fields of study that you noted in the Member Questions section. (300 words or less)

Every one has dreams when they are kids . My was to be an engineer. While the other kids were playing with toys I was fascinated with my uncle's job, electrical engineering. I was so curious, how he could make all those devices work with just manipulating the tiny circuits inside. He noticed my fascination and one day he gave a set of Lego brick; he told that I could use the bricks to design things just like him, since that day I would seat there for hours building different things, from cars to robots, there was no limits. Unfortunately my uncle pass away when I was ten and my parents never understood my fascination for designing things or my curiosity for understand how things work.

During my junior year of high school, this fascination for building things became stronger. I was part of a robotics program. My first impression was of surprise and excitement, I was finally going to work with real circuits and bolts just like my uncle. It took a while to learn the programing part but when I finally did it, I had a feeling of satisfaction. I remember, after I familiarize with the program, I would design anything I came up with.

This year I decided to take compute math, which is an introduction to computer science, to learn more about programing. For me engineering is a way to express my ideas and being able to bring then to life.

At Columbia's college of Engineering I hope continue my passion. I think that the core curriculum will allow to experience every field of engineering since my first year. At Columbia I will be able to participate in the different research projects that will allow me to become the successful engineer I want to be.

Maria, you have presented an essay that answers the prompt in great detail. You should give yourself a pat on the back for that accomplishment :-) The essay just needs to be polished at this point by correcting certain grammatical errors and tightening the paragraphs so that it will be very concise and easy for the admission officer to read. I will revise the paragraphs whenever possible in order to shorten the essay even further. Remember, you don't need to hit the maximum word count to be interesting. The more you say with less words, the more effective your response will be. Right now you have 299 words. I was able to reduce it to 235 words without deleting any important aspect of your essay. I also aligned the answer to better suit the prompt provided by Columbia.


-I was greatly influenced by the time I spent with my uncle who is an electrical engineer. Ever since he gave me my first set of Lego bricks and encouraged me to be more than just curious about engineering. He enticed me to get creative and build things with my bricks. I was hooked on becoming an engineer after I build my first Lego car. From them on I would sit for hours at my work table, building immobile and mobile models of cars and robots, dreaming of what I could make them do without limitations. My uncle was always there to cheer me on and feed my curiosity with answers to my questions until he passed away.


- My interest in electrical engineering did not wane with my uncle's death. Instead, it built a stronger fascination within me, While in high school, I found myself dawn to the world of robotics because it allowed me to work with real nuts, bolts, and circuits the way my uncle did. Even though it took me a while to learn how to program the robots, perseverance helped me achieve a great sense of satisfaction when I finally developed a working design from scratch.


- In preparation for my college courses, I enrolled in Computer Math this year as part of my AP studies. I feel that this course will best prepare me for my future classes in Engineering at Columbia University.

"one day he gave [me] ..." (add me after the word gave)
"I would seat there" should be "I would sit there"
It may be beneficial to talk more about how all the other kids' dream jobs when they were younger differed so much from your own and maybe add a little more personality and emotion into it but other than that its really well written and clearly answers the prompt!