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Passion For Design - Common App Essay


Charley 1 / 3  
Nov 14, 2010   #1
I have a passion for design. Ever since I was young, at age ten, I toyed with graphics programs and with webpage coding. I enjoyed it as a hobby and eventually realized that I had found my passion in life.

In ninth grade, I designed logos and miscellaneous graphics for a company that made internet games. I worked for them for a few months until the project was over. It was fun to immerse myself in the professional world; I was sending invoices out and signing contracts. I was also credited on the games with creating graphics. I took pride in this and hoped to continue to follow my passion.

Expanding on this interest in design, I took to a new similar hobby. I took a video production class and absolutely loved it. Music videos provided me a great way to express myself. Getting the perfect shots and editing could cure my boredom anytime. It was all about quick and fast cuts for me. I took the skills I learned from inside and outside the class a little further. And as a Christmas gift for my family, I made a compilation of old home videos about my late mother, to preserve her memory in the form of video.

More recently, I spent my entire summer scripting, making design choices, and working with my school's business office to finance the website for the student newspaper. I got officially involved with the newspaper and when the school year started I began hosting and advertising the meetings. I edited articles and placed them on the website. I liked that I was providing my school with a website that students could use and be proud of.

I spread out my interests and auditioned to work on my school's morning live T.V. broadcast station: "WNHS." I was the program director. I took my design skills and designed on-air graphics for the show. I also worked on the team that would broadcast the Football games. It is so exhilarating to be on-air, live. Once again, I felt that I was helping to provide my school with a service they could be proud of.

My enthusiasm for the design process now is leading me to become a web entrepreneur. I have one client right now and hope to expand in the future. This is enjoyable work because I can do what I want to do and work for myself.

I hope to continue to do what I love after college. To do this I must further my knowledge of design principles and business. I think college will be the best way for me to accomplish these goals and to go on and realize I have more than just these simple goals.
Baeringer 1 / 11  
Nov 14, 2010   #2
Wow! Impressive that you held such a prestigious job so young.

This part seems it could use some fine tuning:
"Expanding on this interest in design, I took to a new similar hobby. I took a video production class and absolutely loved it."

The "took" seems repetitive and a bit confusing since its meaning slightly changes between the two uses.

Here is my suggestion for an edit:
"Expanding on this interest in design, I took to a new but similar hobby. Following a video production class, I had exposed myself to the world of music videos and fallen in love."

I know my statement lacks personal style but that gives you leeway to fill in your own!

Good luck with where ever you're applying!
OP Charley 1 / 3  
Nov 14, 2010   #3
Thank you so much! It didn't come off arrogant, did it?
brownhopeful 2 / 6  
Nov 14, 2010   #4
Sorry...this may be a little brutal

Ever since I was young, at age ten, I toyed with graphics programs and with webpage coding i would change that to I have toyed with graphic programs and webpage coding since I was 10

I enjoyed it as a hobby and eventually realized that I had found my passion in life.
awakward change to Eventually I realized that I had found my passion in life

In ninth grade, I designed logos and miscellaneous graphics for a company that made internet games. I worked for them for a few months until the project was over. It was fun to immerse myself in the professional world; I was sending invoices out and signing contracts. I was also credited on the games with creating graphics. I took pride in this and hoped to continue to follow my passion.

This is just awakward in general...in the beginning you said that you're designing and then you're sending out invoices place all of what you did at the beginning of the paragraph and work from there

Expanding on this interest in design, I took to a new similar hobby...
Would say some thing like "after working for company x I decided to expand my horizions and take a video production class"

there is a lot more that needs to be edited really re-read this it's a great idea but the wiritng needs work I would suggest bringing this to and english teacher

also use a thesaurus and replace smaller words like fun with something like thrilling
OP Charley 1 / 3  
Nov 14, 2010   #5
Thank you for your advice!

I sent them invoices. I was paid for the hours I worked. I logged my hours. Seems like a good thing to include to increase clarity but it felt like a lot of detail.
Baeringer 1 / 11  
Nov 14, 2010   #6
No, no. Not arrogant. College essays are sort of painful to write because they certainly require for you to brag about yourself.
OP Charley 1 / 3  
Nov 15, 2010   #7
Okay, thank you for your advice. I really need it!


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