small school high school
pick one, or small high school
Nestled at the foot of the hills, the campus is very beautiful
This beautiful campus is quietly nestled at the foot of the hills
As I went to classes, I really enjoyed having small classes
similar opportunities like Village and possibly even more
like the Village, and possibly even more.
Also being a historical liberal arts college with great traditions and literary alumni, I believe
You need to make Bowdoin the subject of your sentence if that's the first part. Right now you are saying that you are a historical liberal arts college...
You end very abruptly. It's very important and unique that you lived in 3 other countries, that's what this essay wants you to highlight! Certainly you had connections to those other places. I know there's a word limit, but it'd be good to elaborate on that. Place your bit about Bowdoin at the end to wrap it up!
Take a look at mine, tell me what you think!