Hey guys,
I struggled thinking of things to what to put it but its beginning to work. I had to write an essay to my first year roommate introducing myself, why i chose Babson, and what i look forward to in college. Thanks a lot!
Dear Roommate,
Great job getting accepted into this astonishing institution! I'm sure the butterflies in your stomach are more lively than ever. I have never been more nervous yet excited in my life! I'm looking forward to beginning a new life in a new environment. It will be interesting but I'm excited for this challenge.
During the last few years of high school, i have been looking forward to this transition i am about to make from childhood to adulthood. We will be encountering this transition together, and even though at times we will feel displaced and frenzied, we will always be there to help each other.
My name is Connor Krell. I was born and raised in Western Massachusetts. I've always had many hobbies and I love keeping busy. I love activities ranging from skiing to cooking. I commit myself whether I am in school, playing sports, or just trying to be a good person. I love to work hard for something that pays off. I may not be the most intelligent guy who is an amazing writer and so on, but I enjoy working hard in things that have meaning to me. Many people have described me as personable, which is a trait I try hard to fulfill. I am someone that is easy to come up to and talk about anything while at the same time being trusted. Our relationship is going to build a strong foundation in our college life, and it will be tough to knock either one of us down. Everything about college is going to be new to us, and having someone close will be one of the easiest ways to adapt. This hopefully has given you a somewhat clear picture of who I am.
Anyways, Babson has been a name I had been hearing since I first began the college search last year. I knew it was one of the best business and entrepreneurship schools in the country, but i wasn't quite sure what to expect. It wasn't until I visited the campus in the summer of 2010 that I realized how great it would be for me. I also love being creative and when I heard about The Foundation Program, it immediately grabbed my attention. Babson will give me the skills I need to understand the world of business. I believe Babson will hand me the key I need to open the door to success. Babson will help to pave a sturdy road for me to succeed in whatever my aspirations will be.
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Once again, great job getting this far! I really am looking forward to meeting you and obtaining my first friend in this long journey!
See you soon!
Connor
displaced and frenzied
Great choice of words here...
Hey, I think you nailed it.. this has great enthusiasm and energy... and most importantly, you show that you have a clear idea of where you are going and what you want to do. That scores a lot of points.
I don't like the last sentence, though... a sturdy road... not cool, and "whatever my aspirations will be" is definitely not cool. You already have aspirations.
That is my only complaint, though!
:-)
