Hey plz plz give me some advice. Its really urgent! Thx a lot!
If The Walls Could Talk
I am surrounded by walls; and I cannot wait to jump over the barriers.
I do enjoy my college life in Peking University. Yet it's just I live in Mainland China, a country teeming with walls, from the Great Wall which elegantly snakes half of the country to the tiny gray wall that guards our campus against public. Some walls are invisible yet directly affect individuals. The powerful Firewall blocks websites like Wikipedia.org and Youtube.com; all college students are obligated to take "political" courses presented in the language of Marxist ideology; many films were cut off or banned for merely suggesting sex; local newspapers are censored over and over again before publication...And in the realm of academics, the broadest definition of research as practiced in China includes any research using the Marxist framework and methodology.
How I wish the walls could talk and understand my feelings, but they can't and they never will. And to jump over the walls has therefore always been my ambition. I want to study and live in a place where people have the freedom to express their ideas and beliefs and where information is transparent with no distortion.
In 2007, I entered Peking University together with two thousand peers who were considered as the most intelligent Chinese children. Though I may not be the most talented among the student pool, I am always the most persistent, the bravest and the most responsible, who tirelessly chases after the dream. I also keep in mind that I should make best use of college education and become a great person，for I am responsible for the millions of Chinese families whose kids did not go to college because they failed the entrance exams or could not afford the tuition fee.
My goal is to become the best female economist I can be in this male-dominated field, a great woman who makes contribution to the economy. Though my major is economics, I fell in love with the fantastic world of mathematics-the most challenging and rigorous of all intellectual pursuits. I remember how excited I was in every mathematics class. The abstract mathematical model helped predict how a strike in automobile industry would affect other parts of the economy. In statistics, based on the samples, I could easily tell the behavior patterns of large groups using data of a survey. I really enjoy attacking the intellect's most extreme sport. And the more I read about mathematics, the more curious I became. More importantly, since I plan to go to graduate school to earn a PhD in Economics, an undergraduate major in Mathematics will also help my academic background look solid and increase my chance.
I want to go to Stanford more than any other school in the U.S., because I know by heart that this will satisfy my search for the best education and intellectual freedom. I fell in love with the school the moment I read about it. The mathematics department is among the top in the U.S, which means to study and conduct researches closely with world-class faculty and top students from all around the globe. I particularly appreciate the agreeable 6.4:1 faculty-student ratio that allows students to have a frequent contact with faculty and peers through interactive class discussions, workshops and office hours. In PKU, class sizes are huge, usually with over 300 students and it is indeed hard to meet faculty except during the class sessions. Besides, attending seminars and lectures given by the Nobel laureates and top-notch leaders in various fields will greatly enhance my learning experience.
However, it is more than the academic atmosphere that makes Stanford my perfect match. Understanding that an individualized process of learning is intellectually impoverished, I look forward to meeting people with diverse cultural backgrounds. Having devoted considerable time to PKU Model United Nations during the past four years, I will attend MUN conferences in other parts of the world with Stanford's MUN Club members. I will also be on the Women's Gymnastics Team. Though not perfectly professional, I established the Gymnastics Club in PKU, for I love this artistic sport which shows agility, flexibility and female beauty in a passionate way.
Jumping over the walls, I will have the most rewarding education in Stanford. And wherever I am, I will be spreading Stanford's pioneering spirit of innovation, democracy and diversity. I cherish the chance to have the most rewarding education and will one day make Stanford feel proud of having me as an alumna.
I do enjoy my college life at Peking University, yetit's just I live in Mainland China, a country teeming with walls, from the Great Wall which elegantly snakes its way through half of the country to the tiny gray wall that guards our campus against the public.
To jump over the walls has therefore always been my ambition.
In 2007, I entered Peking University together with two thousand peers who were considered to be the most intelligent Chinese children.
I also keep in mind that I should make the best use of my college education and become a great person，for I am responsible for the millions of Chinese families whose kids did not go to college because they failed the entrance exams or could not afford the tuition fee.
My goal is to become the best female economist I can be in this male-dominated field, a great woman who makes contributions to the economy.
"Though my major is economics, I fell in love with the fantastic world of mathematics-the most challenging and rigorous of all intellectual pursuits."
Maybe you should say in your opinion!
The abstract mathematical model helped predict how a strike in the automobile industry would affect other parts of the economy.
I want to go to Stanford more than any other school in the U.S., because I know in my heart that this will satisfy my search for the best education and intellectual freedom.
The mathematics department is among the top in the U.S, which means to study and conduct researches closely with world-class faculty and top students from all around the globe.
"Though not perfectly professional, I established the Gymnastics Club in PKU, for I love this artistic sport which shows agility, flexibility and female beauty in a passionate way."
There are also many men in gymnastics!!
Here are a few small fixes, but your essay is focused and interesting.
Good luck!
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