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"people who advanced despite nay-sayers" - Describe the world you come from


Ninjawesome 1 / 1  
Dec 27, 2010   #1
Hey, this is just the intro of my response. I was curious as to whether or not this response would be too broad compared to telling a story about my family (seems too common) or my experience joining and working with a FIRST team.

Prompt: "Describe the world you come from; for example, your family, clubs, school, community, city, or town. How has that world shaped your dreams and aspirations? (200-250 words)"

The world I come from is filled with people who advanced despite the overwhelming number of nay-sayers, stood firmly with their beliefs against all odds, and ultimately changed the world-people like Thomas Edison, the Wright Brothers, Walt Disney, and Socrates. These types of people inspire me to contribute something to the world.
sidbush 3 / 26  
Dec 27, 2010   #2
It sounds great! Perhaps change around the last sentence to be more specific like stating exactly what sort of thing you want to contribute to the world.


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