Firstly, i really like that you got straight into the nitty gritty - dead bodies, I find this is well written, straight forwarded and easy to read,
I remember when I was only 5 years old, I would hear an ambulance rush past my house, and I would tell my parents "One day, that's going to be my ambulance". I'm not sure what initially sparked my interest in medicine but all I know is that I've always yearned to be a doctor. Medicine is the perfect union between my passions of biology and chemistry, and my passion for helping others and leaving a positive impact on the world.
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I remember when I was only 5 years old, hearing an ambulance rush past my house, I would tell my parents "One day, that's going to be my ambulance". I'm not sure what initially sparked my interest in medicine, all I know is that I've always yearned to be a doctor. Medicine encompasses my academic passions, biology and chemistry, alongside my passion for helping others and leaving a positive impact on the world.
I was in complete awe at the elegance, intricacy and genius of the human body's design
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The awe inspiring elegance, intricacy and genius in the human body's design captivated me.
My interest in medicine was reaffirmed when I was given the opportunity to study human anatomy at Queen's University. I was in complete awe at the elegance, intricacy and genius of the human body's design. Additionally, I had the opportunity to observe cadavers and determine their cause of death. I had initial hesitations pertaining to the cadavers having never seen a deceased human being before. AlthoughHowever once I realized what a rare and amazing opportunity was made available to me, to study a human body in such close proximity, the cadavers promptly became much less daunting and much more interesting.
Additionally, I had the opportunity to observe cadavers and determine their cause of death, which initially caused hesitations pertaining to the fact I had never seen a deceased human being in the flesh.
I hadhave nothing but the utmost respect for the people who donated their bodies to further the education of countless students.
The PLME itself is an excellent fit for my academic and future professional goals because I am always looking for a new challenge .
not only satisfying my constant thrive for challenge, but ( maybe add another point?)
The PLME would allow me to pursue mybountiful passions as an undergrad in order to become an active learner, while also maintaining my aspiration of becoming a doctor.
Maybe instead of stating that yo have passions, state a few or allude to them !
Otherwise this is really we'll written ! :)