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'the piano for the freedom' - Commonapp: Elaboration activities


kt94 3 / 9  
Dec 22, 2011   #1
Hi everyone, this is my essay for the elaboration on an activity.
Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum).

I enjoy playing the piano for the freedom it allows me. Throughout the piece, I can experiment with the little nuances that shape each phrase or the effects created by pedalling, while still remaining faithful to the character of the music. As my fingers dance on the keyboard, my emotions rise to the surface as I live out the story of the piece in my imagination. It is during these moments when I feel completely free from any burdens and allows me to reflect and think calmly. When I was younger, I used to loathe the endless hours of practice. But now, I enjoy putting in the extra effort for that upcoming performance. Indirectly, my approach to music has translated to other aspects of my daily life, and has benefited me. I believe that I am a more creative and disciplined person today, and I have music to thank for.

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Please comment and help me improve.
Thanks.

ZhoeK 5 / 173  
Dec 22, 2011   #2
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I enjoy playing the piano forbecause of the freedom it allowsed me. Throughout thea piece, I can experiment with the little nuances that shape each phrase or the effects created by pedalling, while still remaining faithful to the characterintegrity (suggestion) of the music. As my fingers dance on the keyboard, my emotions rise to the surface as I live out the story of the piece in my imagination. It is during these moments whenthat I feel completely free from any burdens that might plagued me.and allows me to reflect and think calmly.I am also able to reflect and think calmly.(think calmly still sound pretty awkward to me) When I was younger, I used to loathed the endless hours of practice I had to endure . But now, I enjoy putting in the extra effort for thatan upcoming performance. Indirectly,mM y approach to music has translated in to other aspects of my daily life, and has benefited me. I believe that I am a more creative and disciplined person today, and I have music to thank for that .

Overall a nice essay.
Hope this helps!
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OP kt94 3 / 9  
Dec 22, 2011   #3
Thanks so much for your feedback. Will do.

I agree that the reflect and think sentence is still pretty awkward. I'll try to work on that.

Thanks again.


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