KnightOfGondor 1 / - Jul 2, 2015 #1I'm applying for UT transfer this summer, and this is one of the two essays I need to write. I made my best shot at a first attempt, but I'd love some input. Here's the essay:"As a homeschooled individual, I've always had a desire to learn. After all, it's what motivated me through high school, and continues to at Austin Community College. When I find a topic interesting, studying stops being work, and more about enjoyment. I enjoy learning about the past in history, in fact I'm quite sad that there's no more history classes required of me. So I read about it in my free time. I enjoy government and economics, because after all, if I don't learn about them and vote my conscience, then I would end up a sheep. I loved my psychology class, human behavior is interesting to me. Most of all, I love my computer science classes. While it's true that I already know most of the material, I like helping the other students understand how to program, in ways that the professor can't always convey. Seeing them where I was awhile ago, but being able to contribute to their progress makes me feel like an asset, useful and knowledgable.Ever since my first program, I've always enjoyed coding. In fact, I hope to do just that in the job field. I've narrowed it down to two ideas for my dream job, and I would love to do either. I want to be a white hat hacker, otherwise known as a type of security analyst. Breaking into a system to help find possible breaches and backdoors sounds exciting to me. Being able to keep other's privacy or hard work safe, well that's a huge plus to the job as well. The other job, I want to do the programming for a game. Ever since I've played The Witcher 2, and seeing the passion and love for the game the developers put into it, that's something I hope to contribute to. I wish to put love and passion into my work for a people to enjoy and maybe love as much as I do.I gain fulfillment out of working hard, studying hard and putting my all into a project. Whether that's my job, my relationship, or a test, I strive not necessarily to be the best there is, but the best I can be. I might not always succeed at what i'm trying to accomplish, but that's okay. I always put my all into doing what I can. For work, I do my best to accomplish all I can. All of my bosses have loved having me around, and my current job at Starbucks is no different. I like to stay loyal to my employers, but not in a blind to the world kind of way. I don't drift from job to job, I tend to stay with the one I have. I don't quit. I'm not a quitter and never have been. For my relationships, I'm always there for my few close friends, and I stick with them. disagreements, fights, it's all stuff that can be worked through or moved past. I love my fiancé and I'm loyal to her to the end, we're making our live work together. I study hard, I work for hours on end, and I don't compromise.I put school and my future first, and with that, I don't have much of a social life or partake in vices. I don't party, I don't drink, I don't smoke, I don't go clubbing. I feel like those vices get in the way of what's important to me, and for my life. What's important is my education, a loving relationship, and a good job. Vices go against everything I work for and desire.So why would I pick the University of Texas? Simple. The computer science program is exactly what I'm looking for. Specialized, prestigious, and a place to allow me to unleash myself into my work. I need a university that will take me all the way to my future job, and I hope the University of Texas at Austin is looking for a hard-working student that will strive to do the best he can. "I hope I did alright, I'm certainly not expecting perfection, and y'alls input would be greatly appreciated. Go ahead and criticize all you want; it's my future and I need to perfect it. Thanks y'all!