Tell us more about your interest in transferring: Why does brown appeal to you as a college option? Who are what has influenced your decision to apply? (2000 characters or less)
While I was searching for colleges the first time around, everybody that I turned to for help gave me the same advice; when I found the right school, I would know it. Apparently I missed out on this experience, because out of all of the schools I visited, not one felt right to me. Truthfully, I never got the gut feeling that a school was exactly where I wanted to be, until I visited Brown. Everything about it felt perfect. The picturesque campus, the brilliant student body, and the renowned academics all aligned perfectly with how I envision the rest of my college career.
The freedom offered to students to design their own academic path intrigues me, as the education offered at Emmanuel is bound by the confines of a strict curriculum. Brown would accommodate my interests ranging from East Asian Studies to Economics, while concurrently offering a solid foundation in the biological sciences. What appeals to me most about the academics at Brown are the many unique course offerings available in the sciences. 'Neurobiology of Learning and Memory' pertains specifically to my fascination in the complexities of the human brain, while 'Principles of Experimental Surgery' satisfies my interest in the marvels of modern surgery. The abundant research opportunities available to undergrads also greatly contribute to the allure of Brown. I have many questions about the intricacies of the immune system, and features such as the senior Capstone would allow me to conduct my own independent research project in the field of immunology.
Although the academic aspects of Brown are prominent facets of interest, it is the open-minded student body that appeals to me most. While on campus, I became acquainted with a group of sophomores at Brown. When I expressed an interest in applying, they went above and beyond to inform me of how great the school is. The way that they described it, with such enthusiasm and satisfaction, made me certain that Brown was exactly where I wanted to be.
Essay #2
Describe what academic field you wish to pursue at Brown, how you came upon that interest, and any post-graduation career plans you may have considered. (we prefer that you limit to 500 words and avoid repeating essay submitted for the common app.)
I am awoken early on a Tuesday morning by sharp pains throughout my hip, collarbone, wrist and hand. Without opening up a single shade in my room I can already tell that it is going to rain today. These concurrent pains are the result of numerous fractures, dislocations, and sprains that I have suffered throughout the course of my life, and they are exacerbated by changes in the barometric pressure of the atmosphere associated with rain. Throughout my childhood, I was involved in just about every sport ranging from ice hockey to snowboarding, and needless to say, over the years I have become closely acquainted with the emergency room setting. Though I recall certain hospital experiences to be more traumatic and gruesome than others, with each visit I was always amazed by the skillfulness and composure of the physicians who treated me.
Thorough experience in the medical field from the patient perspective has definitely influenced my desire to become a physician. I know the feeling of helplessness that patients experience firsthand; the feeling of laying on a hospital bed with a compound fracture, or with a gash so deep that you can see your femur, and depending solely on your physician to fix your wounds. I want to go into medicine because I am utterly fascinated by science aspect of the healthcare field, and all of the potential innovations and advancements to be made. However, I aspire to become a doctor because I want to be dependable for my patients, just as the physicians who treated me have been.
I wish that I had uncovered my passion for the sciences earlier in my academic career, however the past cannot be changed. It was during the spring semester of my freshman year that I began working at Harvard Medical School. There I was able to speak with renowned physicians about the possibility of entering the medical field. They gave me the insight, and more importantly the confidence to pursue medicine. Since then I have been working relentlessly to excel academically, and I know that my ambition will allow me to continue to do so in the future.
Brown's Health and Human Biology Program offers exactly what I am looking for, a rigorous and challenging education in the sciences. This program goes above and beyond the bare minimum need to fulfill medical school requirements and provide preparation for the MCAT. What I find most attractive about the program is its interdisciplinary approach. Although I am undoubtedly infatuated by biology, I would thoroughly enjoy integrating public health, biomedical engineering, and neuroscience courses into my curriculum. I strive to be versed in all aspects of the sciences, which is something that I can only achieve at Brown. I know that if admitted, an education from Brown will benefit me for the rest of my life, throughout a prosperous career in medicine. Whether I am a cardiothoracic anesthesiologist, or a surgical oncologist, I will proudly carry the Brown name with me.
I tried to be specific with both of these essays as to why I personally want to go to Brown. it is my dream school, and I know I am an underdog but I figured it was worth a shot. Any feedback?
While I was searching for colleges the first timearound , everybody that I turned to for help gave me the same advice
.... "turned to " implies that you were seeking their help
The picturesque campus, the brilliant student body, and the renowned academics all aligned perfectly with how I envision the rest of my college career.
great sentence :)
Thorough experience in the medical field from the patient perspective has definitely influenced my desire to become a physician.
.... This needs your attention; I think you can present it better. Rather than saying "from the patient perspective", tell it in a more creative way that can bring up emotions. You can tell that through an experience even.
