'my place among poets' - University of Michigan- A Group You Belong To

(now this isn't all of it, but am I on the right track?)

I take my place among poets with a love of smooth stanzas and musicians reveling in the perfect harmony of two voices. I situate myself between the writer who listens lovingly to the scratches of her pen on crinkled paper, and the casual observer pricking his ears up to the pitter-patter of raindrops on a window, the tick-tock of an ancient grandfather clock, the smooth gravel of a groggy man's voice, shaken awake.

I am an audiophile, unashamedly in love with sound- with noise, with the force pounding on our eardrums every second of every day.

I was not always like this. However, as I look back on the years past, the swell of sounds engulfs my memory. I am a child repeating my father's erratic words, his accent making the phrases resound like a jagged rock tumbling down a smooth concrete hill. I am the sleepless student tapping her fingertips on the computer keyboard, enviously listening in on the whispery quietness of a sleepy, silent night.

This gave me goose bumps. Its soooooo goood! Your ability think outside the box is deff present and word choice makes this an interesting read.

Honestly, the only thing I can think to say is that the ending is a bit abrupt-but I think it can work. No blatant grammar errors or style issues.

Great job! Thanks for the edits and all the best luck.

First of all, all I have to say is GO BLUE! It's nice to see a fellow (future) Wolverine on here :) You have got yourself a solid essay. I love how you really stepped outside the norm for this essay. It's pretty fantastic, but the end of it ends pretty abruptly. Maybe some way to tie everything together? I believe you have a little bit more than 80 words until you reach the limit. As always, go blue! and good luck!