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A plane ticket to Richmond - Umiami Supplemental Prompt

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Dec 26, 2021   #1

Umiami Supplemental Prompt

The University of Miami's official mascot is the ibis. Folklore maintains that the native marsh bird is the last to take shelter before a hurricane hits and the first to emerge once the storm passes, making it an apt symbol of courage and resilience.

Considering your ability to control your own motivation and behavior, how have past experiences helped build your courage and resilience to persist in the face of academic and life challenges so that, once these storms pass, you can emerge in continued pursuit of your goals?

I would greatly any feedback you guys can give me.

I look down at my plane ticket to Richmond, Virginia. My stomach begins to churn, here we go again, I think to myself. I have moved four times, living in Florida, Brazil, California, New York, and Virginia. Packing everything up, moving, and assimilating to a different place is always a slow and difficult process but I have developed an effective method to make each move easier. I make sure to always decorate my room the same way, keeping memorabilia from each move. From Florida and Brazil, I have my favorite stuffed pig and tiger, which now adorn the top of my dresser. From California, I have my FC Bayern Munich Flag and from New York, I have a framed panoramic picture of Albany, both of which hang above my desk. Each of these objects serves as a reminder that I have adapted before and can do it again. Next, I always make sure to join the local club soccer team. Sports are the easiest and best way for me to meet new people and make new friends. Finally, I always make sure to keep in touch with all of my "old'' friends. By staying in contact it makes the initial months less isolating. Following these steps, I make sure that anywhere I land, I am ready to make the most of the experience.
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Dec 26, 2021   #2
Thankfully, you did not use the Covid-19 lockdown to discuss the topic. That is the tired and most common go to topic for most of the college applicants these days. Your essay, in my opinion, has become unique and impressive because it actually follows a backstory of having to constantly assimilate to new surroundings. This is a great reference to how you remain resilient in the face of life's challenges. However, there is no reference to how you overcome the academic challenges.

The essay requires you to discuss 2 aspects of how you remain resilient. Surely with every move that you made, you had to face certain academic challenges right? Be it catching up with lessons having moved in mid-term or, having to find a way to socialize with an educational community that may be very different from your own, as what may have happened in Brazil, the academic resilience is very important to this discussion. Try to provide a seperate reference paragraph to that. Don't just blend it in. Your blending almost made the academic adjusment almost non-existent. Which means you have skipped a full reference for discussion in your essay.

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