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'Playing softball' - CommonApp - Short Answer Essay on Extracurricular


AshieeNicole 1 / 1  
Aug 14, 2012   #1
Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum).

When I grow older and recall fond memories of growing up, I'll always remember the days I spent covered head to toe in dirt and sweat doing what I love the most: playing softball. What started as a just-for-fun activity in my childhood turned into a passion that landed me in tournaments and national championships alike. Playing softball essentially became my life. What is most outstanding is not the cost of the expenses, the travel, or the equipment; neither the number of hours spent training nor the number of trophies I've won, and not any given year's statistics of my team or personal performance. What's most exceptional are the situations I've encountered that helped me become who I am. Hours of practice and countless games have introduced me to dedication, enthusiasm, and hard work - all now values instilled deep within the core of my existence. With those principles, I do everything. Softball has shaped me on and off the field and it will always be a substantial part of my life.

Thanks in advance for your help!
ana_p 27 / 81  
Aug 14, 2012   #2
Hi,

I think, its a very short (..as you've mentioned above 1000 characters maximum), but very nice and well written.

Good Luck!!

Thanks,
Ana.
tallship 1 / 2  
Aug 14, 2012   #3
When I grow older and recall fond memories of growing up, I'll always remember the days I spent covered head to toe in dirt and sweat doing what I love the most: playing softball. What started as a just-for-fun activity in my childhood turned into a passion that landed me in tournaments and national championships alike. Playing softball essentially became my life.But w hat is most outstanding is not the cost of the expenses, the travel, or the equipment; neither the number of hours spent training nor the number of trophies I've won, and not any given year's statistics of my team or personal performance . What's most exceptional are the situations I've encountered that helped me become who I am. Hours of practice and countless games have introduced me to dedication, enthusiasm, and hard work - all now values instilled deep within the core of my existence. With those principles, I do everything.Softball has shaped me on and off the field and it will always be a substantial part of my life.

I'm thinking you can maybe cut some portions of description and instead focus on the impact of softball on you (highlighted in green). Since that's probably the most important part, try expanding that, give more details (expand on "hours of practice and countless games," how have you learned dedication, enthusiasm, and hard work?) on how softball has changed you as a person. Hope that helps.


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