Also, from here on out could we revise essays keeping our beliefs to ourselves out of respect for the writer?
There is something you need to understand. If you want respect, you must give respect. I'll explain.
I for one, want the future generations of our nation's leaders to be well informed of Gods role in the building of our country and what it means to be an American. We can insure this will take place if the children in public schools are granted the opportunity to learn this through the Pledge of Allegiance. Otherwise, I fear that my generation and future generations will be put at risk for living in a Godless unpatriotic country.
By saying this, you imply that non-christians are unpatriotic. That is disrespectful. Rather than focus on how disrespectful this point of view is, I tried to make it clear that saying something like this has the potential to offend your audience. When you write, you should always keep your audience in mind.
I wrote what I believe, and do not appreciate my essay topic being picked apart and marked as, for lack of a better word, stupid.
You may be applying to christian schools, but when you post your essay on a public forum, be prepared for a different reception. If your main problems exist in the content of your essay, you shouldn't want people to sugarcoat the issues.
To put it simply, you are wrong. I do not dispute the validity of your religious beliefs because the existence of a God can not be physically confirmed or dispelled. I do believe, however, you are incorrect in your understanding of religion in relation to the US govt.
This is the first clause of the first amendment to the US constitution:
"Congress shall make no law respecting the establishment of religion, or prohibiting the free exercise thereof"
Now, here is a passage from your essay:
"If the Pledge of Allegiance is omitted from what is taught to children in public schools, it will hinder his or her ability to keep the nation moving in the direction that it was originally intended to go (as a nation with one ruler, God)"
Not only is this statement wrong, but because the Bill of Rights is easily accessible to anyone with an internet connection (which you clearly have), it could be classified as stupid.
Also, it is a promise to us as a people that the U.S.A. will stand together as an inseparable free nation with one ruler, God, who will guide our nation without fault.
As we know from history, our nation is divisible. It was only under the leadership of Abraham Lincoln - a generally non-religious person - which the union was restored.
Finally, it is absurd to say that anybody will guide our nation without fault - especially God. If this is the case, you attribute the institution of slavery, the deaths of millions of indigenous peoples at the hands of Americans, the nuclear attacks on Japan, chemical attacks on Vietnamese civilians, and federally supported segregation to a "faultless" God.
I do not say this maliciously, but your essay has many faults - your essay, not your beliefs - which need to be addressed.