who dare try andto take advantage
Although she normally works alone, I wouldn't mind receiving a few insults in exchange for helping fight crime.
This feels a little awkward. Maybe make the first clause a bit more about you, while still getting the main point across?
find the nearee st coffee shop
I may love beating up my brother,
This makes you seem a little violent, something I don't think NYU would take very kindly to. Maybe change it to something nicer? Or not. It is really funny. =)
Oh, and your movie needs a title; they ask for a name for your phenomenal movie.
This made me smile a lot, though. NYU would be crazy not to take you. =)
If you have the time, would you review my common app essay? Thanks, and good luck!