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'to portray my life' or 'wierd one' or 'about a chat' - common app


maroon5 9 / 57  
Nov 26, 2011   #1
1) I want to portray my life as a movie that the audience is watching in a theatre. I won't explicitly state that i am the main character of the movie but i guess the adcoms will make the connection easily enough.The first paragraph is going to give a very brief description of the fidgeting audience in the hall and will end at the drawing of the curtains and the start of the movie.Each subsequent paragraph is then going to describe a particular scene from the movie( derived from my real life experiences) and show the character's thoughts and emotions during each scene.I hope to convey my character and give a sense of my personality through these scenes...it will be like a detached third person narrative by an omniscient observer...

2 Okay this one is a bit weirder than the first one.I intend to commence the essay by implying that i am on a hunt and have brought my arsenal of weapons along with me, making no specific reference as to the context or specific details of the environment. In the second paragraph i will reveal that i am actually pursuing( sorry if this word has negative connotations girls)

a girl, as in i like her and want to date her. However, the arsenal i refer to turns out to be my notepad and my economics,physics and chemistry books.In the following paragraphs, i will then evaluate the scenario by employing the insights afforded to me by these subjects. For instance, the indifference analysis in economics or some other stuff from chemistry like hormones or something. Basically i will try and employ my knowledge of these subjects in an attempt to plan and execute athe perfect approach that will enable me to get the girl. The essay will be less about the girl and more about the innovative way in which i draw on these concepts i have learned and apply them to this rather unconventional scenario....i know i can do this topic justice and execute it well...however it may end up being too funny or even ludicrous...i mean noone in their right mind would relate economics to getting girls right?? IF YOU GUYS CAN COME UP WITH SOME OTHER EVERYDAY ACTIVITY WHICH PROVIDES SCOPE FOR THE APPLICATION OF MY ECONOMICS KNOWLEDGE I WOULD REALLY APPRECIATE IT IF YOU SHARED IT WITH ME...if ,however, you think that the girl thing can work, please say so...

3For my third choice i wanna write about a chat that i am having with a random stranger on omegle(chat-site).I plan to follow the omegle format and copy-paste the entire chat as it would appear on the website..the stranger is gonna ask me stuff and through my asnwers to his questions i hope to get my personality and cahracter across to the adcoms...This is probably the safest of the three but the hardest to execute without seeming arrogant.

I really wanna write a unique and innovative essay...please recommend one of the above three and feel free to suggest and other improvements or changes that could be made to the above outlines...THANKS
pepsicola 2 / 13  
Nov 26, 2011   #2
i think you would be more successful in portraying yourself through the first one. it is the easiest to develop an actual character and you can relay his emotions and thoughts where as it would be a little more difficult to do in the others. i think so at least. the first is probably your safest bet. it might be a little more helpful to make a selection if you provided the prompt for the essay.
karan11295 5 / 42  
Nov 26, 2011   #3
I love both 1 and 2. But try out 2. If it works, it would be amazing.
And everyday scenario to relate with economics-searching for the best ice cream flavor
bookbug_xd 8 / 24  
Nov 27, 2011   #4
I agree with the above commenter: Numbers 1 and 2 sound best!
I particularly like number 2, but I think you're right to be scared that it'll be too funny. Try to make the essay incorporate both humor and seriousness. You want this girl, and you think smarts will get her. Is this a real experience, by the way? If it is, I'm sure you'll know how to execute this genuinely and emotionally.

You may be right; a person may not relate Economics with girls on a day-to-day basis. However, your idea is unique, and colleges like unique! Adcoms would love a laugh, but they want to see the you underneath that humor. What exactly is going on in your brain?
blueshore 3 / 47  
Nov 27, 2011   #5
I think number two is better only if you manage to write it well- How about you start it and then see how it goes.
amadan 1 / 9  
Nov 27, 2011   #6
I think number 1 sounds really interesting and I would be intrigued to read it because of its uniqueness. However, if you're writing about your life, it may be hard to be concise and specific...maybe try and focus on one specific event in your life?

Please take a look at mine if you've a minute or two!
FreeSpirit11 1 / 2  
Nov 27, 2011   #7
Out of all the possible options, your first idea is by far the best. The readers of your essay will be able to see you from an outside perspective (similar to what the audience is seeing in the movie). Also, a personal statement is less about what you want to major in, but more of "WHO YOU ARE". I think that the first idea would give you the freedom to express who you are as a person. In the end, it is up to you. Do you want to express your camaraderie with economics, or convey your personality. In my common app personal statement, I spoke about how I've struggled with speech over my entire life. It follows my journey through overcoming stammering and my wallflower-like personality. It reaches an emotional climax, when I step onto a platform at California Boys State, and give a speech to 900 of my fellow peers. I used my writing style to to convey my quirky personality and "nerdy" behavior. Hope this helps, and thanks for the insight on my UC Essay.
cjwsk12 1 / 4  
Nov 27, 2011   #8
I think number 1 would be the best considering the reader will get to know who are you a lot better than the other topics.
Alikap 6 / 15  
Nov 27, 2011   #9
If you're a really good writer number two could turn out to be really awesome. Number 1 is a good idea but it might be hard to do that in under 500 words. Give it a shot and see what happens. I wouldn't go with the omegle option though, as it could definitely come across as arrogant or even just strange.

Check out my essays if you get a chance, I would really appreciate any insight
alexp 2 / 2  
Nov 27, 2011   #10
Number one would be most effective.
adamhkim54 2 / 12  
Nov 27, 2011   #11
This is the breakdown that i saw in what you had.
1. This is safe and sure. You would use this for schools that you know that you would get into.
2. Risky and creative. Make sure put in time for this you definitely don't want to write this one if its last minute.
3. I don't think that one will work.. sorry.
helpthischick 1 / 3  
Dec 3, 2011   #12
I would definitely go for the second idea. I love the part where you pursue a girl. It shows a teenager. The chemistry texbooks and whatnot is great for weapons. ha ha. I, personally, find the second idea to be much more appealing. However, the other two ideas are good too. I'd love to read your essay, whichever one you chose to do. Good luck!
happykid93 2 / 9  
Dec 3, 2011   #13
I think 2 will be amazing if you write it well. It seems really unique. And humour is always good! Just be sure to let your personality shine as well - that is after all the most impt aspect of your essay. I love your ideas you are really creative! Good luck on your essays!


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