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I portray the overly outgoing student; Western AEO/HBA Essay; Uniqueness


cefireo 1 / 2 1  
Dec 24, 2012   #1
Topic:
The ideal Ivey HBA student has a wide range of interests, perspectives, and life experiences. Describe the uniqueness you have brought as a student to your high school based on your own interests, perspectives, and life experiences. Please be concise and respond using 250 words or less in your answer.


Essay:

While I strive to maintain a high academic standing, I also understand the importance of gaining hands-on experiences in real life. Truly, these are the events that grow and empower a person. In high school, I portray the overly outgoing student who embodies a wide range of interests that offer important experiences and knowledge which continue to shape me even as I am writing this essay. These experiences are permanent, transferable, and catalysts to my future - especially as an Ivey student.

Throughout my high school career, I've consistently, actively, and enthusiastically been involved in various leadership opportunities. With passion, I have helped students in DECA prepare for their competition. With empathy, I have organized a charity talent show for the students in my region. With concern, I have led workshops to combat social discrimination. With loyalty, I returned to China to become a volunteer English teacher for elementary children. Perhaps, the reason that I enjoy being a leader so much is that I love to see my actions produce results. From the thrill of victory with my school's DECA chapter to the untold satisfaction by raising money for rural farmers in India, each experience grants me a newfound perspective that enables me to fully actualize myself.

Overall, I have gained a great deal of life experiences and perspectives through my range of leadership roles during high school. Armed with a plethora of meaningful experiences and an open mind, I am able to bring to Ivey innovative ideas and outlooks.
sukhomoon 4 / 14  
Dec 24, 2012   #2
the reasonthatwhy I enjoy being a leader so much is that I love to see my actions produce results

I returned to China to become a volunteer English teacher for elementary childrenstudents?

Overall, good essay... It looks tough to get every activity you have done to 250 words... :/
However, within the word limit, you did an amazing job!

ps. I don't know how to "dissect" your writing better than this... It's 250 words, so I guess your format is fine. Or you might want to combine the first and last paragraph and place the combination in the conclusion

Cheers


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