Tell us about an experience, in school or out, that caused you to rethink or change your perspective. What impact has this had on you? (maximum 200 words)
Being raised as a child, poverty was not an issue that I had to deal with. The trip to Cambodia changed my perspective on poverty. I remembered that I questioned my mother about the unclothed children in front of the airport entrance when I first got to Cambodia. As an innocent little girl, I did not understand the severity of poverty, I always thought that children are poor because they are not behaving well. Unfortunately, it was not the case. One night as I started eating in the church, I discovered ten children at the door. The pastor invited them in and offered them each a bowl of plain rice. They said thank you and started scooping rice with their dirty hands. Suddenly, all of them stopped eating and they started to wrap the rest of the rice in their torn clothes for their family. At the moment, I finally understood the cruelty of poverty. I was so touched by the children that I decided to sponsor a child with my friends. I understand that I do not have the power to resolve the issue of poverty, but I will try my best to make a difference in the world. (200 words)
Explain how you responded to a significant challenge that you have encountered and what you learned in the process. (maximum 200 words)
Three years ago, I was stung by a poisonous insect near my artery on my right arm. I had to do a surgery immediately to prevent the virus from going into my brain. Due to the large incision, the surgery had damaged my nerves severely and I lost the mobility on my right arm. As a right hander and a piano player, I lost all my hope; I could not imagine my life without my right arm. After staying in the hospital for a week, seeing people fighting for survival, I finally understood the fact that I have a healthy body is not inevitable. I realized that I always take things for granted and I do not appreciate what others have done for me. With determination, I started to work hard in my physiotherapy sessions. Although I did not know whether or not I would regain the mobility in my arm, but I knew that I was already very fortunate compare to people that were born without an arm. To this day, I treasure everything that I have as I serve people in the community gratefully. (186 words)
I am kind of short in time. Please edit them and give me some suggestions, Thanks!
Being raised as a child, poverty was not an issue that I had to deal with.
Being raised as what type of child? poor? or rich?
This sentence does not deliver any meaningful insight to the reader about your background.
I think you need to work a lot here. You need to discuss something that changed your old perception about it. So, tell them what you first thought as poverty and how it got changed later. This response needs more strength.
