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(power outage / the supplier / liberal education) - University of Southern Cali


GraceTaylorWei 12 / 41  
Jan 3, 2012   #1
Hey guys, I really need your honest help on this one. To me, it's funny, but perhaps to others it could be horrific and strange. I'll help edit yours in return of course!

Describe your academic interests and how you plan to pursue them at USC. Please feel free to address your first- and second-choice major selections.

I hear the ticking of the clock. I'm lying here, the room's pitch dark...

It was another power outage, but fortunately I had reserve battery on my laptop. I continue editing my stepfather's marketing script on behalf of his company. Just two years ago, he was asking me for company name suggestions; now, his language school business collects over 250 students from around the world. I, the unpaid secretary, was thrust with tasks that included designing a company logo, replying emails, and writing letters. I became a part of the business body: when the company faced woes, I was troubled; when it grew, I felt the same sense of pride and fulfillment that compelled my stepfather to become completely devoted to his work. It wasn't long before I was irrevocably captivated by the field of business.

I wonder where you are tonight, no answer on the telephone...

"Grace, the supplier isn't picking up the phone," cried the Vice-President of Production. As the President of my student-run company, i was responsible for managing my team through periods of unprecedented success and frantic chaos. Together, we formed a collective body capable of achieving more success and realizing more goals than an individual ever could. From my experience in leading a student-run company, I determined my intended academic focuses of business management and economics.

'Til now, I always got by on my own. I never really cared until I met you...

When I discovered USC, it became the only institution I could envision myself in. USC is widely known as a constantly evolving institution that provides a liberal and modernized education for its students. It will not only equip me with knowledge for the workplace, but will also provide me with the unrivaled Trojan Network to help further my career. USC makes a difference in the world by empowering its students to succeed - Its faculty of Nobel-Laureates and accomplished researchers is open-minded and accessible to young, idealistic hopefuls such as myself who seek to make a lasting impact. It's invigorating to have a mentor to listen to my ideas, improve them, and help realize them. At USC, I will be surrounded by a diverse body of students who foster an atmosphere of intellectual and social growth. Their influence will help mould me into the successful woman I strive to be.

[iAnd now, it chills me to the bone - how do I get you alone?[/i]

The University of Southern California is my first choice. The only question is - will I receive the letter of acceptance?
janeth 3 / 16  
Jan 3, 2012   #2
have you ever served a atudent from USC?? If you have,it would be a good base to explain that first hand you're aquinted with trojans...your interest in USC will seem common,although the part where you want to further your career is unique

I know the song..this kind of seems too matched up if you may,
wondering where you are,no one picking up the phone
it seems to be applying to you more if it's the vice president of production calling you, I'd rather if you were calling him to tell him the supplier wasn't picking up!

or if you were calling the supplier yourself then continue with the flow..
you know the show principle don't tell...why not continue that sentence with details in this statement like franctic chaos for tight deadlines, and the same for unpredenceted sucess??

As the President of my student-run company, i was responsible for managing my team through periods of unprecedented success and frantic chaos.
greeley 6 / 15  
Jan 3, 2012   #3
It's an interesting approach it was a little confusing at first but overall well done.

"It was another power outage, but fortunately I had reserve battery on my laptop. I continue editing my stepfather's marketing script on behalf of his company" I would suggest a better connection between these two sentences and the First part

same with the next part ..I found those a little confusing

very well worded conclusion

Good luck im applying there too :)
OP GraceTaylorWei 12 / 41  
Jan 4, 2012   #4
Thanks guys for all the input. I wanted to be funny, so I put literal events that happened for the actions in the lyrics.. it was really kind of impromptu! :P @Nicole Good Luck with your app, if you need any help just ask me :)

Anyone else??


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