Art seduces because it is random and unpredictable
^Is randomness and unpredictability, actually seductive in your opinion?
very time I think about science, I feel like a five-year-old entering a candy shop: the colorful liquids in the test tubes, the shocking chemical reactions and the hilarious "mad-scientist" hairstyles.
^I do not understand how just thinking about science, can make you feel this. Perhaps, 'imagine' would be the more appropriate word in this context?
When I discover a new concept of calculus that is capable of clearing up thousands of my doubts about this world, I get the feeling that I'm in a MasterCard commercial - priceless
^Do you feel priceless, or is the Mastercard commerical priceless?
In my thirst for numerical knowledge, I gobble up information from textbooks and websites while attentively listening to my father's explanations of the weirdest phenomena
^If you are thirsty, you do not gobble. You drink instead, to quench your thirst.
Do you always listen to your father explain while you read textbooks and websites? Always? Because I would have thought that after a while, it can get a bit distracting.
Science is what makes sure the die stops and lands on one of its countless surfaces.
^What are you talking about?
I have chosen to major in engineering precisely because it satisfies my craving for logic and allows me access artistic fulfillment.
^If you have a craving for logic...then why did you say that logic reminds you of a bubble gum brand?
Suddenly, out of the blue, a cartoon light bulb popped out his head and stood there for a couple of seconds.
^O no. How did a light bulb pop out of his head? Did his head explode or something?
*P.S I do not get the relevance of the mouse story. You also do not give enough detail or reasoning as to why you are
applying to that particular school of study.
Rather, you give a fairly decent narrative, albeit the errors in grammar and content. However, for the most part, the narrative seems relatively ineffective due to it's irrelevance.